It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
In todays world, for the matter of technological progresses and therefore easy access to information and datas, everyone's life has been affected in a broad way. There is no doubt that this effect has influenced people lives in both good ways and bad ways. A plenty of people owns the conviction that it is not healthy for us to know about all events that are happening around the globe, whereas others might hold exactly the opposite view. I soundly support the first conviction rather than the later one. In what follows, I am going to aptly investigate into the most prominant reasons to justify my point of view.
The first precise point to be discussed is that it will busy our mind which may lead to distraction of our important tasks such as our work or study. Nowadays, it is very crucial to everyone to focus on a single task. To be able to concentrate on one task, accordingly we have to eliminate everything that will distract us and is not related to our porpous of doing such as in this case irrelavant news. In my own experience, I remember a time whe I was getting my master degree and Iwas working on my thesis. At that time, the war of Syria had been started. Even it was a very important news and I was divastated by all the bad thing that had been happening to Syrian, but at time my most important task was to finish my work on time.
Another equaly remarkable point carrying this opinion is that when we know about all the events are happening, it will make us to feel bad and be anxious and increases our anxiety. This is because mostly the events and news which get viral and get high impression are bad ones. For example. when I read about events on websites or newe papers I feel sad about sociaty and especialy the world we are living in.
To put it in briefly, all listed grounds lead us to the conclusion that it is better to know just about what is related to you and your life and ignore the rest. this because they will distract you from you actual work and what you meant to do and brcause they wil increase your anxiety which is harmfull to your essence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, briefly, but, first, if, may, so, therefore, whereas, as to, for example, i feel, in brief, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1714.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4175257732 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37825019116 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525773195876 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.3432037126 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.125 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.625 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24161123214 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0592468658732 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602832717588 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134923393913 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386347354423 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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