Friendships is the valuable word that change humanity lives. All children in the world when they start talking, they want to make connection with others so the first step of friendship start with a small conversation, like as ‘’hello, my name is Sera, and you?’’ but it depends on the situation that they faced on to keep in touch for long-time or break up and find new one. Some people believe that, it’s important to keep old friends than makes new friend, but I disagree with this statement. In my life my old friends bothering me more than the people who don’t know me.
First, I want to discuss about why people need friends? I remember, last year my university proposal was about alone people feel like as empty refrigerator. That article had explained, when your children got bored, they we went to kitchen and try to find something to eat so, they open the refrigerator but its empty while they knew it, they do it in several times a day. At the end they found out noting change. Therefore, they have to change that situation to go out and some foods. the alone people should learn to change the situations by themselves. How to have fun? How to enjoy they life? The firs solution is, find the person that he/she makes you happy. So that friendship become progress and they trust to each other. And their life will be more interesting than before.
On the other hand, if I want a little pessimistic, I should say, don’t trust anyone also your old friend. I know being alone is so hard but try not to being close to some one that’s not matter he/she is your best friend or a new person that you meet. For example, I saw a movie about 2 or 3 years ago was about, 2 men had friendship since they were child and they worked together for 13 years after that one of them make money more and the other one finds out he makes that money, an insurance scam thus, lots of people have problem but he gets rich and richer. Any way their friendships becomes an enemy of each other and his old friend that was his old friend for while one day gets angry and buy a gun and shoot him on his head.
Last but not the least, I share this story to explain my idea about friends and friendship. It's no matter you know person for while or just for a day. Humans are unpredictable.
In conclusion, maybe makes new friends change our life in a good way or bad way but actually it depends on our personality too. By the way, these questions are change lots of things in keep in touch our old guy or makes new one, to how we behave to our friends? and how much we have expected to others to do something for us or not?
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 283, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o, my name is Sera, and you?'' but it depends on the situation that the...
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Line 1, column 606, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...than the people who don't know me. First, I want to discuss about why peopl...
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Line 3, column 487, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...at situation to go out and some foods. the alone people should learn to change the...
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Line 3, column 602, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'firs'' or 'fir's'?
Suggestion: firs'; fir's
...o have fun? How to enjoy they life? The firs solution is, find the person that he/sh...
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Line 5, column 172, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'someone'?
Suggestion: someone
...s so hard but try not to being close to some one that's not matter he/she is your b...
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Line 7, column 93, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...n my idea about friends and friendship. Its no matter you know person for while or ...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
...w one, to how we behave to our friends? and how much we have expected to others to ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, you know, by the way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2161.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 492.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39227642276 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46162546715 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49593495935 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 650.7 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.1010088431 48.9658058833 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.44 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.68 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263860152353 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0696753159445 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0952522617064 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145411417104 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0840797544692 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 77.57 58.1214874552 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.18 10.9000537634 75% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.47 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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