Friends make an important part of life, we share everything with them and even we sometimes take their opinions into consideration in shaping our decisions. So, it is absolutely necessary to have friends in every stage of our life, who understand and support us. While it is important to make new new friends it is more important to retail our old friends too.
Firstly, our old friends who are close to us will know lot about us than the newer ones and therefore they can give better inputs during our situations which would fit us better. Also, we can rely on these important opinions of them while we make our decisions since they know us better. This may not be possible in the case of newer friends. For example, in my case, when I was really confused about the type of career I should pursue, I have consulted one of oldest friends and he has suggested me in this and this is the best suggestion I ever got. This was possible only because he knows me so well about my strengths, interests and areas I will like and will do better and his suggestion incorporated all these.On the other hand, this would have been less possible or not at all had I consulted a newer friend, not because they do not care about me but only because they might not know what I am strong at and what would fit me.
Further, we can be really free around our old friends since the the level of understanding would be very high. Rest assured, our secrets and fears are safe with them and we can rely on them more than on us. We will have so close understanding with older friends that some of our feelings and intentions between us are really tacit and does not require words to express. Additionally, it is easier to maintain friendship with older friends. For instance, I have an old friend with whom I haven't talked and met in years but suddenly he has called me up on my birthday to wish, I felt really happy and we talked so much, even though we had a lot to catch up, the connection and rapport between us is so intimate that it didn't even feel like we haven't met in a while but met just yesterday or so. We made so many plans to meet and we ended up not making to it due to one of us has to cancel them for other reason, and none of us got offended truest to our heart since we know that situations and have understood the perspective of each other. This would be no way possible with a newer friend nevertheless it would take time to attain this with them after which ironically they should be called 'older' friends and not newer anymore.
To sum up, as mentioned in the reasons above, although it is important to make new friends and expand our circle, it is absolutely important to maintain older friends this will ensure we have 'quality' of friends rather than 'quantity' of them.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'necessary'.
Suggestion: necessary
...ion in shaping our decisions. So, it is absolutely necessary to have friends in every stage of our l...
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ur life, who understand and support us. While it is important to make new new friends...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: new
...pport us. While it is important to make new new friends it is more important to retail ...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the oldest'.
Suggestion: of the oldest
...r I should pursue, I have consulted one of oldest friends and he has suggested me in this...
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Suggestion: On
...d his suggestion incorporated all these.On the other hand, this would have been le...
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Suggestion: the
...eally free around our old friends since the the level of understanding would be very hi...
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Suggestion: the; the
...eally free around our old friends since the the level of understanding would be very hi...
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...tance, I have an old friend with whom I havent talked and met in years but suddenly he...
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...pport between us is so intimate that it didnt even feel like we havent met in a while...
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...ntimate that it didnt even feel like we havent met in a while but met just yesterday o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 92.0 43.0788530466 214% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2259.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 517.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.36943907157 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39075635478 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.437137330754 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 704.7 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.3623976519 48.9658058833 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.1875 100.406767564 141% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.3125 20.6045352989 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213062496028 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0992693105613 0.076458572812 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119400040832 0.0737576698707 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194173506778 0.150856017488 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100367778785 0.0645574589148 155% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.66 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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