Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why do you think people visit museums?

Traveling has a pivotal role in our life because that broaden our horizon. When we travel to new place we can visit a variety of spot like historical monuments, museum and many other places. Many adult visit museum . I feel this way for reasons and explore in the following essay.

First, museum indicate the culture and history of a community. People can be familiar with a new place by visiting a museum and reach a profound understanding about a new city or country. Take myself as an example, When I went to France two years ago, I visited famous museums in Paris that was not only enjoyable for me but also understandable. That was incredible that all of horrible and pleasant events in the past like the war and peace was visible in the museum. This example indicate importance visit museums.

Second, visiting a museum improve our insight into problems. We notice ancestor of a country following which property in their live. All of this material existence in museum and people access to that easily by visiting museum. Moreover, visiting museum provide an opportunity for people to explain a country better to other individual and encourage them to visit that country. Other paces in a country is possible exist in another country too like recreation center nut museum is unique for every place.

In conclusion, I strongly believe that visiting museum is important when we travel to new place because we familiar with culture and history of a place and improve our insight.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, i feel, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 52.1666666667 63% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1243.0 1977.66487455 63% => OK
No of words: 253.0 407.700716846 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91304347826 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60604049909 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 212.727598566 64% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541501976285 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 408.6 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.2232447751 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.8666666667 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8666666667 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.420985923294 0.236089414692 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157957305696 0.076458572812 207% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1200033029 0.0737576698707 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26583302046 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0479067562921 0.0645574589148 74% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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