Now children do not behavior as well as the children did in the past. Which one of the following measure do you think can help children (age 5~10) behave better?
A. Control the time they spend on TV or movie.
B. Take more time to chat with children.
C. Monitor the interaction between children and their peers.
There is no doubt that nowadays, children play a key role in society. due to its paramount importance, there has been always a hot controversy among people regarding ways by which students' behavior can be developed. Even though some people are inclined toward the opinion that parents should monitor the interaction between children and their peers or allocate their time toward chatting with them, some others may take another viewpoint which emphasizes TV or movie effects. From my vantage point, the latter belief is true. In what follows, I will cogently pinpoint my compelling reasons to vindicate my perspective.
The first noteworthy reason regarding the issue is that children are not mature enough to manage their time. In other words, they are eager to devote their time in front of the television. Thereby, it is not possible for them to learn how to behave in the real world. Furthermore, it is axiomatic that some TV contents are not suitable for children. For example, action or horror movies may have detrimental effects on children. For this reason, I believe that it is hard to conceal this issue that TV has a tremendous role in children's behavior. Parents can set an agenda or rule for children on how to spend their time in front of the television. Furthermore, they should be aware of some contents of the TV program in order to discourage or encourage children to watch them. This claim is substantiated by scientific polls in which participants were asked whether their children's behavior is improved by making this rule or not; the result of this poll underscores the fact that this way can be considered as a pragmatic solution.
The second reason that I want to delve into is that self-esteem is so important for their children and I firmly state that parents should consider this skill, seriously. Unfortunately, these days, children cannot behave in an appropriate way because parents always want to monitor their interaction between their peers and consequently, they deprive of their children to gain a sense of independency. Moreover, when parents decide to chat with their children, children become submissive persons. Finally, they are not able to make decisive or realistic decisions. In addition, I think that some tv programs have invaluable contents. Therefore, parents can utilize them in order to teach their children how to behave better in society. To shed light on reason, I would like to draw your attention to my personal experience. When I was a child, my parents always wanted to control me and they did not allow to have a free-interaction with my friends but it was not pragmatic for me. After that, they altered their way and they encouraged me to watch some TV programs which can be fruitful for my social skills. Thanks to my precious experience, I daresay that monitoring their interaction and talking with them frequently are not feasible solutions.
To recapitulate the discussion of all the points mentioned above, I should state that it is more beneficial for parents to allocate specific time for children to watch TV. Not only are children not mature enough to control themselves, but also some specific programs can be useful for them. It is hard to disguise the role of television in life. All in all, it is recommended that parents not take television for granted.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, so, therefore, for example, i think, in addition, no doubt, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 43.0788530466 186% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2775.0 1977.66487455 140% => OK
No of words: 557.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98204667864 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79983068387 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473967684022 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 855.0 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6205599008 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1071428571 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8928571429 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92857142857 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291236831061 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.088640239288 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0628505714515 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191054148613 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416587898865 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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