Nowadays children rely too much on the technology like computers smart phone video games for fun and entertainment Playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for the children s development

Nowadays, children use several ways for their fun and entertainment. While some children focus on technologies such as computers, smartphones, video games, some play with using simple toys or outside with their friends. It is so controvertible for their development. In my view, they should make decisions to play outside with friends or use normal toys for their amusement. This choice makes them more sociable, communicative, and opportunities for increasing their friends.

To begin with, playing outside with friends improves children as sociable people. When they decide to rely on the technologies for their fun, they often have to play alone. Therefore, they do not earn the method of how to show their attitude in front of people. Moreover, it is so frequent for them to make arguments to their parents. On the other hand, the children who go outside with their friends can concern about their fellows and solve their problems. As a result, the life of their companies in the future will be so delightful.

Secondly, children will be more communicative people by playing with their friends outside. They have to communicate with their friends because they often choose the play in a huge amount of ways. This situation is so similar to the meeting held in rudimentary companies. For example, workers must make a solution to the problem of low demand. In the meeting, they conduct plenty of answers from the workers who have high logical thinking. Hence, one of the ideas made by a worker is acquired by the executive of company.

Finally, opportunities for enhancing friends for children will be established in playing with their friends outside. While they play outside of their house with their friends, many children also play with others. In this situation, they sometimes play sports such as soccer, basketball, and frisbee each other even they definitely do not know about themselves. Thus, they are able to make more friendships with many people.

To sum up, young people should play more with their friends outside than with the technologies. I surely believe that they are able to be sociable people, make conversations, and earn more friends.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, such as, as a result, in my view, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 355.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12112676056 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75013263643 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.49014084507 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 538.2 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.4041274516 48.9658058833 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.0434782609 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4347826087 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47826086957 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296084065646 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110585831917 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0952872951994 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203881462688 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0603607131377 0.0645574589148 93% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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