Nowadays, children rely too much on the technology. Like computers, smartphone, video games for fun and entertainment; playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for the children's developments.
“Friends take center stage in developing children’s personalities,” Tara Westover, Educated, 2018. Which one is advantageous for children’s development: using new technologies for fun and entertainment or playing outside with their friends? As far as I am concerned, playing outside with friends not only increases children’s social skills and prepares them for the real lives, but also keeps them healthy. In the following, I am inclined to put forth some arguments to support my position.
First and foremost, friends play a major role in improving and establishing the social skills such as team-working and communication skills. For instance, playing outside with friends rather than playing with various technological instruments such as computer and smartphones promotes children to involve in group activities. As a result, it augments the children’s team-working. As well as, it helps them to interact effectively and as a consequence expands their communication skills. Thus, playing with friends seems to improve the children’s social skills.
Another thing coming to the mind is that children’s playing with their peers can be implied just as an imitation of real life. For instance, by playing, a child can learn how to behave, how to sacrifice his/her ambitions, and how to prepare for the coming life and variegated responsibilities. Indeed, he or she can learn special concepts such as responsibility, fairness, and other moral values. In other words, children’s playing with friends puts them in a brink of real life. Therefore, it is a merit that establishes the moral values.
Last but not least, it has been elucidated that playing outdoor with friends helps children to be healthy because their immune system can be triggered effectively. The fact of the matter is that the immune system can be spurred and altered by both the physical and mental stimulants. For instance, according to the Immune Journal, playing outside with friends assists children’s immune system to be developed effectively. It causes an upsurge in the recognizing T-cells, while it reduces the naïve T-cells effectively. Hence, immune system, altered powerfully, can do its duty rigorously.
To wrap things up, although some people believe that novel technologies such as computers, smartphones, and video games bring funny games and other entertainments for children and has a great merit, others think that children’s playing outside with their friends is advantageous because it improves their social skills, prepares them for a real life, and keep them healthy. If children had given up the solitary, they would have been prosperous in their lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, another thing, for instance, such as, as a result, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2301.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57142857143 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.33983540384 2.67179642975 125% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515738498789 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.0022167704 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.571428571 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.34028522672 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111858948433 0.076458572812 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100982982139 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212927009686 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394238532041 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 10.9000537634 138% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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