Nowadays, children rely too much on the technology, like computers, smartphone, video games for fun and entertainment;
playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends would be better for the children's development.
Development of technology provides various new entertaining stuff to today’s children. Some people are arguing that it would be better for children’s development that playing simpler toys or playing outside with friends than rely on the technology. I agree with this statement.
Playing computers, smart phone, video games are harmful to children’s vision and mental health. Every technology referenced before all has screens. Children are hard to control their playing time, and a child plays video games all day along, it will finally make the child shortsighted. Moreover, even adults have a mental problem like feeling more alone and have no emotion to do anything when they addict to a smart phone. Do not mention the impact on the young child. Entertaining technology stuff will consume their energy. And even worse the child will be more diffidence and hiding in the visual network world.
However, playing outside with friends or simpler toys would be better for their body stamina social ability. It is good for building teenagers’ body and needs interacting with friends and doing stuff together. Take playing soccer as an example, which needs a lot of running, jumping and cooperating. Activity as playing soccer increases blood flow and activates endorphins which develop children’s emotion; they will have more willing to do things positively. Cooperating with their friends, let them know there are not alone and fit in the group of friends.
Besides, playing simpler toys sometimes means more creativity in some ways than video games. Video games set the plot by programmers and children just need to follow the instructions, hard to say it is creativity. In contrast, simpler toys like a paper and a crayon open the creativity world for children. They can put their dreams into the paper or draw anything they want. Creativity does not mean they must create something magnificent; simply expressing their mind is good enough.
To conclusion, technology entertainments are harmful to children’s physical and mental health, playing toys and with friends make them more fit in the group and extend their creativity. So, I agree with the statement.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, however, if, moreover, so, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1858.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 347.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35446685879 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88753041363 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.533141210375 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9443994429 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.4545454545 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7727272727 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.54545454545 5.45110844103 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368422490433 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10622547163 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125412093063 0.0737576698707 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224361697121 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0867467795935 0.0645574589148 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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