Nowadyas people do not need their parent for help
The answer to this question can be varied from person to person. Nowadays's people's lifestyle have changed enormously. In my opinion, individuals can be successful easier without helping of their familiy members than in the past. The are some reasons, the most outstanding of wich will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
TO begin with, with the rapid growth of technology, people are able to make their decision by themselves. As a matter of fact, There are a lot of similar situation on the interent which enable ones to use them in order to become prosperous in their lives in comparison the past. For example, when I was a bachelor student. I had a part-time job in the university campus magazine as a reporter. Then, As I remeber, one time. I had an interview with professor Nejati who is well-know historian in my countery. He said me that based on my experiences, nowadays, fewer people refer to their parants for heliping because each person has a lot of person, and also there are great deal of sources which assisst people in order to acheieve their goals than the past. For this reason, I do believe that huge volume of information due to progression of technology meet people's needs.
The second reason why I agree with it is that thank to avaiable much more job apportunitie, people are experiencing independant and self- reliant life. In the past, they had to continure their fathers or ancestors job, by doing so their lives relied on them and they should ask them for helping. On the other hand , nowadays, people attend the university easily and expand their horizon and then find a decent job readily. In addition, there is a famous proverb in Persain the equivalent of which in the English may sound like this" the more people have facilities, the less they need to others". This fact clarifies the fact that sinnce they are able to make their lives by themseolves and their lives are not depend on others, today's people do not to need their familiy members for helping. Consequently, facilities make people's lives easier that they are not depend on others.
In conclusion, I completely believe that fewer people refer to their familiy memebers for asking help. The rapid growth of technology, Not only provide them a plenty of information making their life easeir, but also there are a lot of job apportunities making them self-reliant.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Message: 'Say' cannot be followed by a direct personal object. Did you mean 'told'?
Suggestion: told
... well-know historian in my countery. He said me that based on my experiences, nowada...
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Line 3, column 633, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun person seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of people', 'a lot of persons'.
Suggestion: a lot of people; a lot of persons
...ts for heliping because each person has a lot of person, and also there are great deal of sourc...
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Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'deals'?
Suggestion: deals
...lot of person, and also there are great deal of sources which assisst people in orde...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... ask them for helping. On the other hand , nowadays, people attend the university ...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
... by themseolves and their lives are not depend on others, todays people do not to need...
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
... peoples lives easier that they are not depend on others. In conclusion, I complete...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun job seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of jobs'.
Suggestion: a lot of jobs
...g their life easeir, but also there are a lot of job apportunities making them self-reliant....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, may, second, so, then, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a matter of fact, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1974.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87407407407 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72219975769 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523456790123 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6411718065 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.7 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322022929977 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.089809220917 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0822129636956 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18531755721 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0664009311414 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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