Preparing young children is significant both for parents and society. Parents can prepare their young child for future life in different ways. Some people believe its better youth have a part time job and some disagree. In my opinion, it is not a good idea that teenagers have a part time job. In the following essay I elaborated some reason.
First of all, studying is the most important role of teenagers because youth have ready mind in this age. In comparison with the adulthood, teenagers have better learningness power. On the other hand, they can better get focused in school material and could not get distracted easily. For example, when I was a teenagers and studied in a high school I had this ability that handle various exam. I could ready for two or three exam at the same time that is impossible for adult. If I had a part time job surely I could not take good mark in school because I had limited time for studying.
Secondly, teenagers should enjoy their life and taking part time job counter them with adulthood issues. In the future they have difficulty and now it is better for them to be relax and enjoy their life. Take myself as an example again, when I was a teenager I had fewer responsibility and more spare time, so I could do my favorite works without get concerned or embarrassed. Moreover, anxiety and stress increase for teenagers that have part time job. It is true that if they take job they get money and have independent but in the future they have more time for getting decent and acceptable job.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that taking part time job for young adult is not a good idea because their duty in that time is study and they should enjoy their life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 52.1666666667 38% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1412.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5993485342 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4188732957 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475570032573 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 450.9 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2466122387 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.0588235294 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0588235294 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.88235294118 5.45110844103 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.5376344086 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.396518461288 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143532336036 0.076458572812 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.094236483966 0.0737576698707 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273375361766 0.150856017488 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540010911872 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.1 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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