the opinion of celebrities are more important to younger people than they are to older people
Celebrities always play an important role in modern societies and they usually states their opinion about many different subjects. some people believe that youth are affected by their opinion but others think that their adults believe their quotes more than their childs. i subscribe to the idea that opinions of famous people is more important for young people than older people.
to begin with, younth have little informention about the last opinion of celebrities. celebrities usually say their opinion during their life about many problems and many of them is wrong. but children have not many information about their opinion before their birth so they judge them just by they recent statement but their adults follow them before their birth and consider all of their opinion to trust them. for example, a famous actor in my country hold a campeigyn to help providing drug for cancern people. many children fellow his way but adults did not participate in this work because they rembered that this actor done this work before and the results were bad.
second, the youth follow the famous people because they want to be like them in future. childrens usually like wealth and famous people and repeat their behavior because they think that the only way for their success is becoming a celebrity.since they usually are affected by their opinion without thinking about the consequences of their statements. for instance, some athletes advertize a material on tv and says that these products help people to have enough power during their working time.most of their product customers were children and youth who want to follow their seccess mysteris. finally, the company sold all od these materials by paying money to famous athletes and champions for advertizing.
on the other hands, some older people who cooperate in managing of a country usually follow the celebrities opinion to direct it toward a politital purpose. for instane, some managers guide some celebritits to encourage old people toward a special coalition by investing thei money. the wealth adults usually participate in social activities to increase their money so they always have the same idea whith famous people who work with their desiable coalition.
in conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons celebrities opinion is more important for youth than older people because they have little information about their past opinion and they want to be prosperous like them in future. however some of their aduls often follow their behavior according to ther political purposes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, second, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2154.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24087591241 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51557270571 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452554744526 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.0480887416 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.705882353 100.406767564 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1764705882 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64705882353 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 28.0 5.5376344086 506% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295384902883 0.236089414692 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129412606741 0.076458572812 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137645362395 0.0737576698707 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233795708759 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122582013841 0.0645574589148 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.