In order to become financially responsible adult.would you agree to handle money to children from a young age.agree or not
Managing own finances and utilizing the savings at the time of needs play a critically important role in a person's life, Crises and unfavorable moments are undeniable facts. Should parents realize the significance of teaching their children to overcome these circumstances, they wonder over it scrupulously. There are various schools of thoughts among the people on this issue of giving children control of their money, which some of the parents see eye to eye on it, while others see an issue with it, which in my humble opinion, giving children control of their expenditure is better to groom them as a responsible adult and in the ensuing lines, I will elaborate this on the most outstanding and cogent ground.
First and foremost, teaching children to manage their own money will engender a myriad of advantages for them in the future. The main reason behind this rationale is children will learn to be more independent in their life by keeping their budgets under control. It is critically important if children know the difference between their needs and wants from the beginning. It helps them not to rely on others and manage their lives when they become grown-up. My own life is a compelling example of this. When I was in 5th grade and I was very fond of playing video games, my parents started to give me pocket money for the whole month to instill a sense of responsibility, I have to bough my all school supplies and my favorite video games from the fixed amount of money. In the start, I had great difficulty as I couldn't manage my bills and spent most of the money on my wants and left with no more money to buy essential school supplies, but gradually I figured out that if I hadn't bought video games for a month I could get my school's needs fulfilled and next month I would have bought my favorite game. Fast forward last year, I paid my college tuition fees and get admission to a prestigious university. If my parents hadn't handled the money, I would have never been an independent and successful person now.
On top of this, money management motivates the children to take their studies seriously as they realize that it's not easy to earn money. Knowing the worth of money, children learn that in life nothing is free, and to have a better status in society and good quality of life, they have to struggle, so they focus on their studies and strive for the best outcome. For instance, my nephew is 10 years old, but he knows that he would have to play his role, and do good in his studies as only then he would be able to a successful person and earn a high salary. If my brother had not given him control of his pocket money he would have never realized it and had taken their parent's hard-earned money as his birthright.
For the above-mentioned reason, I am completely convinced that children should have to manage their money to make them more responsible for their expenditures and dedicated to their studies.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ole, and do good in his studies as only then he would be able to a successful person...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, still, then, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2417.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 521.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63915547025 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58660435041 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.47216890595 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 745.2 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.8960953461 48.9658058833 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.176470588 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.6470588235 20.6045352989 149% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.05882352941 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134831186299 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0508821442409 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0319224688167 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0871052528267 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0141013612831 0.0645574589148 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 10.002688172 200% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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