In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
The issue of whether children should learn how to manage their money at young ages is very controversial. On one side supporters of this believe that children at young ages do not know what they want. On the other hand, critics of this idea maintain that children have to learn to be responsible since they have a short age. However, after a very careful consideration, I am of the opinion that is very difficult for children to understand what is being financially responsible and how they should manage their own money. As a result, in the following essay I will explain with two reasons why I believe so,
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that at a short age children do not realize what is the meaning of being responsible, so it is even more difficult for them understand what is being financially responsible. It has been scientifically proved that at age around three to five years old kids are focus on playing. When the grow up their brains started focus in all related with their school. This is about ages between six and eleven years old. So, this demonstrate that children do not care about money or being financially success. A vivid example of this is my son, he is ten years old. He spends most of his time at school doing his projects and assignments. When he comeback from the school in the afternoon he finishes his homework and after that he plays with his friends until he gets tired.
The second reason which is worthy is that children have to be orientated doing activities that benefit them such as practicing sports, swimming or riding bike. Those activities will help the to keep them healthy and actives. The idea is trying to avoid that kids start thinking in things that are not own of their age such as learn to manage their own money at young ages. Kids do not need this that is why parents are there for them. They will have time to think about it. For instance, none of the actors such Thalia or Tony Motola prepare their kids to be successful managing their money, instead they take their kids every morning to take equitation classes at the Matheson Park.
To wrap up, I would like to mention that kids do not need to learn how to manage their money at short age. They have to focus in their school and get good grades. As a consequence, that it will come by itself and they will perfection it in a daily life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 138, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
...versial. On one side supporters of this believe that children at young ages do not know...
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Line 2, column 324, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ve years old kids are focus on playing. When the grow up their brains started focus ...
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Line 2, column 329, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ars old kids are focus on playing. When the grow up their brains started focus in all re...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, for instance, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51282051282 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43191809782 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468531468531 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.7486437324 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.1904761905 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04761904762 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350123261013 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110782837198 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12582809338 0.0737576698707 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234329433525 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104979355445 0.0645574589148 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.95 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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