In order to stay healthy, many people choose to
exercise. Some people tend to exercise
individually such as running and riding bicycles,
etc. Some people tend to participate in group
exercises such as team sports. Which one do you
prefer and why?
Without any shadow of doubt, health condition plays a prominent role in every individual’s life. Having phisical activities such as running and riding bicycles can assisst having a desirable health condition. Although some people might believe that it is good for people to do exercies individually, others possess the conviction that practicing sports in groups and as team members is a better idea. As far as I am concerned, I think it is requried for people to do phisical activities as a team member. I will elaborate on my reasons through the following paragraphs.
First of all, one should take into account that making social contacts as a part of exercisement can improve the efficiency of the phisical activities. To have a healty body, a healthy mind is a necessity. A healthy mind demands socialisation via meeting people, doing shared activities, and helping out eachother. A recent study in France asserts that being a part of a sport team or group, have a positive influence on people’s health condition. In this survey, the athlits who were exercing sweeming as a team, had a higher level of metabolism compare to those who were practicing it individually. The rutine of their practice took palce in a pool in which they had to help eachother practice the moves. It means alongside the phisical activity, they have been a sort of friends, take care for eachother. After each session, their metabolism leve was examied and recorded. At the end of the study, the first group who was in a practice as a team, had 32 percent more improve in their metabolism and overal health.
The second reason I would like to mention is that doing exercises with a group keeps people motivated. Being surrounded with people who are trying to do sport’s routines, will make people stimulated not to give up on their phisical practices. Take a personal experience as an example: back to the time I was fourteen-years-old, I joined a karate team in the school. At first, it seemed so hard for me to work hard and achieve the success as soon as possible, but having known the others in my team, I relized it will take time to be great in the field. Thus, I made a pact with myself that I would not give up, and do my best to be the champion of the year in that time.
Taking everything into account, I believe that participating in group phsical activities in much more effective because it helps people to socialise with others, and it is favorable for keeping them motivated. I believe by being a member of a sport group, everybody will be encouraged to have some exercise programs to maintain healthy.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, thus, i think, sort of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2165.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77924944812 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89486553754 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523178807947 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.429434083 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.095238095 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47619047619 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170116224944 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0491813840577 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054347184832 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113549594722 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519181213567 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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