Making decision, an essential element in young people’s life, has been valued and even triggers heated discussions over how do current young people make decisions. Young people’s choices, in some people’s views, are dependent on their parents. Contrary to these people’s views is my perspective that, nowadays, young people tend to make decisions on their own, due to the benefits from academic learning and the up-to-date technology.
What should be prioritized is that making decisions independently, instead of following parents’ ideas, is beneficial for the youth, by facilitating getting a wide range of knowledge and cultivating personal quality. To begin with, it is making choices independently that facilitates the reception of a great deal of knowledge. In detail, one needs to review massive relevant materials to help him make the final decision, which enables young people to extract a great quantity of valuable knowledge from them; on the contrary, it is impossible for them to access numerous instructional meterials if they only depend on their parents’ opinions. Moreover, it is conducive for students to foster valuable personal qualities by making decisions on their own. To be specific, the more young people making independent decisions, the more likely they confront obstacles, such as the others’ judgements and prejudices, motivating them to be persistent; in contrast, does one need to stick on their own opinions if they completely follow their parents’ instructions?
What should be equally worth discussing is that the current state-of-the-art technology enables us to to be a independent decision-maker, instead of depending on parents’ instructions, by providing efficient search engines and social platforms. In the first place, it is the search engines that helps us solve puzzles when making decisions. To be specific, we can easily investigate a certain subject matter and get crucial information, such as the condition of the current stock market and food prices, by entering key words in the seach engines, enabling current teenagers to reduce information gap and make successful decisions; on the other hand, in the past, people do not have such tools helping them obtain information, so they are more likely to depend on their parents. What’s more, the current large-scale social medias also facilitate making independent decisions. To explain it further, with the emergence of such platforms, people are connected with each other, making it possible for individuals to consult with various experts who are excel in giving objective advice, and thus facilitating making decisions; on the contrary, several decades ago, how can people exploit such plaforms to conduct consulations about their decisions?
Academic learning ability, an vital ingredient in one’s skills, would be enhanced when making independent decisions. Cutting edge technologies also facilitate individuals to be an independent decision-maker. To conclude, compared with previous years, current young people are better able to make decision on their own.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so, thus, in contrast, such as, on the contrary, to begin with, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2626.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 467.0 407.700716846 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.62312633833 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64867537961 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07727629106 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539614561028 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 792.9 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 4.94265232975 384% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 109.179307077 48.9658058833 223% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 164.125 100.406767564 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1875 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.488433973971 0.236089414692 207% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.185041513316 0.076458572812 242% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129777370825 0.0737576698707 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.338776715448 0.150856017488 225% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100786539576 0.0645574589148 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 11.7677419355 167% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 58.1214874552 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.91 10.9000537634 146% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 86.8835125448 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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