in the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decision for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
In today's' progressive and sophisticate world where we live, parents have a profound effect on their children by advising them to make a firm decision. In this line of thought, some people believe that nowadays, youths get a stick on their parents to make a proper decision more than the previous time, while many others posit this notion, stating that youths are more in depend on deciding a future life. I, personally, concur with the latter group for two main reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First of all, in this modern era, adults more than the past get involved in technology so that they can have complete access to information. Therefore they less dependent on parents while making a vital decision for their life. To be more specific, young people who live today, they do not need too much to consult with parents like their ancestor, and they can utilize the network or other sorts of technology to make a well-informed decision. Moreover, previous adults did not reach teachers and school facilities as same as later adults, so they were unable to make a severe decision lonely without the assistance of parents.
Secondly, in the previous era, youths were associated with strict prejudice, which prohibited them from making a redeeming decision in the absence of parents' ideas. To clarify, when society scatters with bias in every part, youths unable to make a complete decision for the future. Indeed, they are occupying prejudice and do not mature enough to make a decision alone. As a result, today, by eliminating discrimination, young people are in depend on their take decision. I can allude to personal experience. My grandmother wanted to be a teacher, because of gender discrimination which existed on those days her father told; it was ban for girls to study. Had she lived in a society free from discrimination, she would have been a teacher.
To sum up, I assume that by the passing time, adults decide without too much interference from parents for two reasons. Firstly because they have lots of facilities and secondly because they are living in a developed society without discriminations. As for the writer's advice, I urge young people to be aware of the consultant with parents
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 143, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...an have complete access to information. Therefore they less dependent on parents while ma...
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Line 19, column 262, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...ety without discriminations. As for the writers advice, I urge young people to be aware...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, as for, as a result, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 377.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01061007958 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7524799026 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527851458886 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4748569658 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.117647059 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1764705882 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05882352941 5.45110844103 129% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.368551553394 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117659847636 0.076458572812 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0970143283522 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230220202202 0.150856017488 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.052133661258 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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