In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.

At past parents like children be dependent on they and wanted to their children just do anything in the way that parents like. However these days there are less parents that like past. Now a day parents let young persons to decide for themselves and have their own life. I believe that parents must not control their children life and it is better to permit children to live in a way that they want. In this essay I will talk about my reasons that I think young people must be independent of parents.

first of all, I think it important to trust young men or women. Young people must learn responsibility and it can be achieved by letting them make decision by themselves. for example a man wanted to married with a woman, his parent don’t not allowed and prevent him, they also can give some advices to their son.

secondly, in my mind everyone have to follow his or her own dream. All people live one time in their life so they must enjoy it and do things that wants. Also it is nesserey to decide by your own and do not do anything that you do not like. Some people do something that they do not want because of they are shame to say no to their parents! for instants there are some parents that have this dream that their child be doctor. they force their children to study hard and push them to be a doctor but if the young man or woman says that she or he do not like it, every think will be better.

To summarize, everyone must decide personally and be independently. By living on other’s decisions everyone will get regretful and sorry for why they didn't live in the way they want.

Votes
Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: However,
... anything in the way that parents like. However these days there are less parents that ...
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...ople must be independent of parents. first of all, I think it important to trust y...
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Suggestion: For
...tting them make decision by themselves. for example a man wanted to married with a ...
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Suggestion: Secondly
... can give some advices to their son. secondly, in my mind everyone have to follow his...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...must enjoy it and do things that wants. Also it is nesserey to decide by your own a...
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Suggestion:
...hings that wants. Also it is nesserey to decide by your own and do not do anythin...
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Suggestion: because they
...ople do something that they do not want because of they are shame to say no to their parents! f...
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...y are shame to say no to their parents! for instants there are some parents that ha...
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Suggestion: They
... this dream that their child be doctor. they force their children to study hard and ...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
... young man or woman says that she or he do not like it, every think will be better...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ll get regretful and sorry for why they didnt live in the way they want.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, i think, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1311.0 1977.66487455 66% => OK
No of words: 300.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.37 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.2815467463 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496666666667 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 405.9 618.680645161 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0906397297 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291843408492 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103949863652 0.076458572812 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707980367419 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180141114141 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0812892038724 0.0645574589148 126% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.07 10.9000537634 74% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.52 8.01818996416 81% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 86.8835125448 41% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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