People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the modern world, education has tremendous importance. An educated person has more chances to build a successful career and excel in life than the person who does not have a college degree. Therefore, in my view, people attend college or university for a reason of career preparation.
First of all, a good career provides a person with a high salary, which makes it possible for dreams come true. For example, I have a pharmaceutical degree and as a pharmacist, I have been paid very well. Back in my country I had an astonishing career and was able to travel a lot all around the world. Traveling and opening new places was a dream for me from the very childhood, and if I had not attended the college, I probably would have not capable of bringing my dreams into the reality. To that end, an educated person has a great opportunity to advance through the ranks of a company he/she works for and make enough money to enjoy things she/he truly likes.
Secondly, having an advanced career gives a person a feeling of self-satisfaction. It is not a secret that people appreciate the educated ones because they can learn something new from them or ask for advice. For instance, while working as a pharmacist I had always tried to help people with their health problems and many times I heard back words of appreciation, which undoubtedly warmed my heart and soul. On the other hand, when someone could not find himself in life, the person can feel needless and frustrate. Therefore, the success at work brings to a person respect of the society and makes the individual feel important for his/her community.
To conclude, I strongly believe that above many reasons of attending college or university the one of building an advantageous career. This is because it lets people contribute to their dreams and become valuable members of the society. That way, I would advise everyone to look for an educational opportunity!
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 311, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to look for an educational opportunity!
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, first of all, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79518072289 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77874138542 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575301204819 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.170899594 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.625 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246786991536 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0891891569956 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118042166934 0.0737576698707 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177325472889 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0722991996652 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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