people benefit more from travelling in their own country than from travelling to foreign countries
People usually have many choices for spending their holiday and releasing their stress after hard work. Many of them decide to travel and visit new places that they never have seen before. Some travelers select some cities in their country that they never went but others want to see foreign countries. I subscribe to the idea that traveling in our own country is more beneficial than going to other countries.
To begin with, the travel cost is lower for people who visit their countries than foreign travelers. Each journey has special costs such as buying a plane ticket, reserving hotel or eating foods and people can reduce their travel cost by visiting their country. For example, the distance between different cities in a country is lower than the distance between different countries so the price of a ticket reduces in this situation. Furthermore, hotels usually increase their residents cost for tourists who come from foreign countries but their coexistence can rent rooms at a low price. These advantages help people to save their money during their journey.
Second, traveling through our own country help us to know more about other ethnics that live with us in the same country. Depends on the area of a country many people with different culture and language live together but they always have little knowledge of each other. This inter-country travel helps us to get more information about them. For example, in my country, 4 ethnicities exist and all of them have their special religion such as Islam or special national work such as farming. When we spend our vacation with these people we can know them.
Third, job situation will improve when people travel to a country. Native people provide different facilities for passengers such as home, food or other essential materials so they can earn money by this work. Entering higher travelers to a city conducive to improvement of the economical situation of people whi live in that city.
In conclusion, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, traveling in own country is beneficial because reducing some major cost also it is a chance to get more information about other ethnics. However, visiting foreign countries is a unique chance for people to experience a different living situation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 489, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... special national work such as farming. When we spend our vacation with these people...
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Line 4, column 278, Rule ID: ECONOMICAL_ECONOMIC[1]
Message: Did you mean 'economic' (=connected with economy)?
Suggestion: economic
... a city conducive to improvement of the economical situation of people whi live in that ci...
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Line 5, column 308, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...xperience a different living situation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, second, so, third, for example, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1900.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 373.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09383378016 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58129194162 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504021447721 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5105525319 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6315789474 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57894736842 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.436122456846 0.236089414692 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145786911617 0.076458572812 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0845500475304 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247161612126 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0784253205485 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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