Nowadays, it is commonly accepted that education is a completely specific and independent science which teachers spend a long time to become a skillful person on it. So, people believe that co-workers or classmates have not requirement eligibility to teach others. Therefore, I, to a great extent disagree with this idea that people learn things better from those at their own level that from those at a higher level.
First and foremost, teaching methods make the learning process more effective in people. For example, a mathematics teacher can teach difficult questions really easier for children than one other student. First, teachers have broad knowledge around the subject, besides they have a lot of work experience with different students with different ability and intelligence. Second, it is less likely that students become confused from teachers explanations. For example, when I was a biology student, during a discussion about class topics between students, we most times became even more confused. In this type of communications, each student looks at to the subject from its own point of view and sometimes it is incorrect. Thus, they give each other inaccurate details.
Another significant fact that should be taken into consideration is that it is possible that students or co-workers create some negative feelings in questioner. For example, in high school, one of my friends ask an approximately stupid question from the smart student in the classroom. Unfortunately, she strongly became the case of mocking and fun in front of others. She was so sensitive and after this happen to withdraw from courses.
On the basis of reasons that were mentioned above, I am convinced that people learn things better for teachers' or supervisors' than from some people at their own level. Because teachers and supervisors are expert people in training people, and it can avoid a lot of possible negative consequences.
- TPO 46 81
- TPO 45 3
- It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. 68
- For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. 73
- Scientists are considering the possibility of sending humans to Mars in the coming decades. Although there have been successful manned missions to the Moon in the 1960s and 1970s, Mars is 150 times further away from Earth than the Moon is. Thus the projec 3
The first body talks only…
The first body talks only about teachers and teaching methods, while the question's target group is people who have a higher level than others.
The second paragraph is too short. There should be some explanations for the thesis statement.
In the last body, the author mentioned " a lot of possible negative consequences" which is a vague statement and she/he did not mentioned these repercussions in the body paragraphs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 419, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...evel that from those at a higher level. First and foremost, teaching methods mak...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, look, really, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1626.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 308.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27922077922 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85937781536 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.607142857143 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 500.4 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.9321590893 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.625 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8125 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.390830112382 0.236089414692 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108277631254 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146932869012 0.0737576698707 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245648746128 0.150856017488 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.134393475637 0.0645574589148 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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