People listen to music for different reasons and at different times. Why is
music important to many people? Use specific reasons and examples to
support your choice.
young people
young people are very important in our society. we spend all time of our life in our society where we were born and became mature. Some believe young people have influence on the important decision that determine the future of society. Others disagree. In my view, young people have impact on the future of society for two important reason.
The main reason is that the society can is progressed by young people. when you use of young person who have motivation, country can progress faster than you use an old person. For example, when I was 18 years old I had a dream that I became more beneficial for my neighborhood. One day, I wanted to register in Student Council but my manager rejected me because I didn't qualify. After a while, I said him that I motivated for this situation and I convinced him who was very unfriendly. Fourtuntly, I could win my school on talent test. if they had trusted me early, we could have won on contest. As you can see, young people have motivation to change everything.
The another reason is that the young people increase defense of country. when you have a lot of active youth, you will strengthen army and these people can make sense of forcemeat for all society. For instance, when I was 24 years old, my country are attacked by ARAGH. although I had to study in Canande universtity, I went back promptness to my country. unfortunately, we failed because of lack of young people. if we had increased our population, we might have won in fighting. Therefore, my country decided that each family had to have at least three children.this excprience taught me that society can reinforce with young people.
In sum, young people have impact on the future of society and have positive roles. Not only do young people cause to progress in country but they also increase defense of country. we should all believe this people and give high position.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, therefore, while, at least, for example, for instance, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1566.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 334.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68862275449 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57721657041 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.8808564253 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 71.1818181818 100.406767564 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1818181818 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09090909091 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145937526942 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0527767223483 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582728915416 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105439859771 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298616070254 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.33 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 86.8835125448 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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