Someone grows up when he is still a teenager becasue he/she have to take the burden of life, while someone is still naive after his/her thirties' birthday because there is nothing in life he/she would worry about. Once it is said that a person becomes an adult in a second. As the moment the he/she realize some of the essence of life. I can't agree more with this assumption, so I belive the resibosibility for one's life makes a he/she an adult. There is nothing easy in adults world. I will address my views in three points.
To begin with, we should be clear the difference between children and adults. The children need to be cared while the adults have the ability to take care of themselves. Look at my brother at age of 4, he is still young. And everytime we went shopping. My parents aksed me to take him to the toilet becasue he should not be in the washroom alone. As big brother I would release his belt and guide him to piss. Suerly, my little brother should be looked after like this, also, this is my responsiblity as being a brother. The adults , on the other hand, can live on their own.
So, the moment one realizes that it is his/her life to live on his/her own, makes a person an adult. While there are lots of events could make people to recognize this point.I still remembered my roomates story shared with me. He is two years older than me. Because he failed the college enterance exam at first year. The time he got the score made him aware the reality that he could not enter the gate of the university he dreamt for. He told me he could not sleep those nights after knowing the results of the exam. Also he had thought a lot those days. He had acctually knew he had to live on his own as his parents could not help him with any other business except for cooking meals for this poor guy who failed in the exam. So at that moment he made up his mind to prepare the exam for another year.
At this moment, the lyrics of Hey Jude came into my mind, the moment you need is on your shoulders. In peoples' life there are several significant moments, they are realted to choices, accidents, failures or success. Every moment of changes could make a people more mature than before. Until the days people really became adults, there may be something still naive in them. While it dosen't matter with the fact that they are not children anymore. The key to unlock the gate of adult is the mature character like bravery, diligence.This maybe easy,for me, after entering the university, I realized my parents were getting older. Thus I would not be the eater of my family, I tried to cook for them. Maybe my dishes were not so dilicious than theirs, my mom and dad were still very happy as I realized the importance of cooking, part of adult life.
In all, I believe the moment of changes which people should take more duty later make people adults.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...n he is still a teenager becasue he/she have to take the burden of life, while someo...
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Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...thing in life he/she would worry about. Once it is said that a person becomes an adu...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... a person becomes an adult in a second. As the moment the he/she realize some of t...
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Suggestion: the; he
...mes an adult in a second. As the moment the he/she realize some of the essence of life...
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'realizes'.
Suggestion: realizes
...t in a second. As the moment the he/she realize some of the essence of life. I cant agr...
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
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...econd. As the moment the he/she realize some of the essence of life. I cant agree more with...
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Suggestion: can't; cannot
... realize some of the essence of life. I cant agree more with this assumption, so I b...
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Suggestion: one's
...ion, so I belive the resibosibility for ones life makes a he/she an adult. There is ...
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Suggestion: a; he
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...onsiblity as being a brother. The adults , on the other hand, can live on their ow...
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...n his/her own, makes a person an adult. While there are lots of events could make peo...
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...uld make people to recognize this point.I still remembered my roomates story shar...
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...with me. He is two years older than me. Because he failed the college enterance exam at...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... after knowing the results of the exam. Also he had thought a lot those days. He had...
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e may be something still naive in them. While it dosent matter with the fact that the...
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Suggestion: This
...ature character like bravery, diligence.This maybe easy,for me, after entering the u...
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Suggestion: , for
... like bravery, diligence.This maybe easy,for me, after entering the university, I re...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...realized my parents were getting older. Thus I would not be the eater of my family, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, may, really, second, so, still, thus, while, except for, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 90.0 43.0788530466 209% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2338.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 531.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.40301318267 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.21633360755 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4934086629 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 755.1 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.6003584229 155% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.273431153 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.0625 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.59375 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.5376344086 325% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 14.0 4.88709677419 286% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119699402573 0.236089414692 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0380652128626 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049180476892 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0812781614289 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0249635629541 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.6 11.7677419355 65% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.94 10.9000537634 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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