people in society work in many different sittings, and for a variety of reasons. what do you think is the main reason why people have jobs?
1. to feel happier about their lives.
2. to save money
3. to develop new skills
It goes without saying that in this complicated and progressive world, where we live, working or having a job is the most important part of our lives. There has been a controversial debate among people working as to what is the main purpose of having a job. From my perspective, people like to have a career because they fell happy, and two reasons to support my view are presented as follows.
To begin with, working is an effective way to meet essential needs, which helps people to feel satisfied with the living and be happier. It is not a secret to anyone that we all have different needs that have to be met, so having a job and incomes is the best way to meet our financial obligations; otherwise, we should rely on others especially our families and be dependent, meaning we will not be able to feel satisfactory since we cannot fulfill our basic necessities. My personal experience is an illustration of this concept. During mu education I did not have any part-time job to pay my tuition and earn the living, thus I was relying on my father to be able to continue my course of study in the university; I remember that I was so frustrated in that time since I was feeling guilty that my father had to try to make more money, so I got depression and I could not focus on my materials and courses. Had I worked during my education, I would not have made my father disappointment and I would not have gotten depression. As you can see, it is really important to be independent by having an occupation since we are able to fulfill ends and feel happy.
Furthermore, having a job, humans response to their significant natural desire and they will definitely feel good about themselves. It is crystal clear that it is human nature to be productive and helpful; all of us need to be considered as efficient individuals, and it is not going to happen unless we do something such as having a job. Escaping from the clutches of slothfulness makes us more confident since we know that we are useful for the society in which we are living. Having a career, people are able to use their talents and accomplishments to not only earn money but also help their counterparts. In this way, no longer will people having job feel unhappy because they are acting according to their natural desire, which is being productive and doing something useful.
In sum, taking aforementioned reasons into account, I think being happy is the main reason for working. Not only will people are able to be independent, they will also feel that they are productive by answering to their instinct request.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 455, Rule ID: BASIC_FUNDAMENTALS[1]
Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
...atisfactory since we cannot fulfill our basic necessities. My personal experience is an illustrat...
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Line 4, column 238, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...by answering to their instinct request.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, really, so, thus, as to, i think, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 15.1003584229 232% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2123.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 461.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.60520607375 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63367139033 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77722843395 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496746203905 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 681.3 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.3243425121 48.9658058833 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.6875 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8125 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260605601019 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10015707663 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0594369784292 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181225931685 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396685474756 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.05 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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