Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in this progressive and sophisticated world, where we live, life has been more complex and hard for people. There has been a controversial debate among people living in the present time as to whether having an ability to make plans for life is important or not. As far as I am concerned, the ability to make a plane is helpful especially for youth, and two reasons to support my point of view are presented as follows.
To begin with, making plans and having an ability to organize, young people are more likely to enjoy a better mental health. It is not a secret to anyone that living in today's world is challenging and everybody should do its various responsibilities as well as possible, which can put a lot of pressure on one's shoulders. When there are different tasks to do, human beings will be overwhelmed with anxiety and stress which have detrimental effects on overall health. To put it in more vivid picture, when I was a university student, I had a lot of duties to do such as studying for exams, working part-time to pay the tuition and working on my thesis, unfortunately I did not have any plans how to them because I thought that making plans or being organized is not necessary. No longer did I have power to do such responsibilities simultaneously since I was depressed. Had I practiced planning for my future, I would not have gotten depression in that period. As you can see, anticipating the consequences of our actions by planning we definitely enjoy a better mental health.
Furthermore, doing this, organizing and planning, will help juveniles to be more successful individuals in their future. It is crystal clear that the key for success is having an ability to manage hard situations by planning. When people especially youth have plans, they are sure that the can prevent some not all destructive consequences, meaning they predict the future and making plans for it. As an illustration, my best friends had a presentation about biology and she was nervous since she had to talk in front of countless students and answer their questions, but she made a plan and decided to organize its thoughts by practicing potential questions that students could have asked. Fortunately she was able to answer every question immediately since she had a plan how to do that and now she is one of the most important engineers in my country because she can organize and make plans for difficult circumstances.
In sum, some people I am sure would disagree with my opinion but I do agree that young people should have such abilities; Not only will youth enjoy a better mental health, they will also be more likely to be successful.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 215, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...among people living in the present time as to whether having an ability to make plans for lif...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, well, as to, such as, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2232.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85584272485 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501075268817 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 702.0 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.801349089 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.5 100.406767564 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0625 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9375 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267893281674 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0926314202574 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396924982479 0.0737576698707 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165785493015 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0187707031582 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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