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professioanal athletes, such as football or basketball players, should not be paid the high slaries thet they receive from their teams.

Nowadays, being a professional athlete is one of the most important wishes of teenagers, and achieving this wish not only needs persistent efforts but also need talent. Professional athletes are a group of people with high salaries, and some reasons justify this payment. one of the important reasons is that their special situation exposes them to injuries. Nevertheless, in my opinion, there are more important reasons that do not justify the high payments to athletes and professional sports.
First of all, we live in a world where much money is needed for many purposes, which are more necessary than professional sports. For instance, starving is an important problem in less developing countries, and also there are many regions in the world with health problems. So allocating athlete's skyrocketed salaries to these problems can be more beneficial.

In addition, yearly, there are different professional competitions worldwide like football World Cup competitions or Olympics that help the rich countries become richer while the amount of filibuster is not negligible in these competitions. These competitions infusion millions of dollars into the rich economies while not yielding economic gains for poor countries. For example, all Olympic competitions occurred in rich countries while had the rich countries had helped less developing countries, they would have been suitable destinations for important athletic competitions.
To sum up, by taking all of the reasons mentioned above, I conclude that being a professional athlete and paying attention to professional athlete competitions are so good, but the salary payment should not be more than ordinary people to prevent abuses.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, nevertheless, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 43.0788530466 35% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1439.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 259.0 407.700716846 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55598455598 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01897913694 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 212.727598566 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2883661629 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.818181818 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5454545455 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3636363636 5.45110844103 208% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112128865746 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466009790315 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.03676350498 0.0737576698707 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0720430293696 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376040617196 0.0645574589148 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

More content wanted.

Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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