Question Some parents offer their school age children money for each high grade mark they get in school Do you think this is a good idea Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some parents believe that the reward of cash should not be offered even their children get high grade in school. However, In my belief, it is crucial for most students to be rewarded by money at each vital milestone, but not for those who are actively studying hard students.
Many people are concerned with student's improper usage of money. Of course, pupils are too young to be enough self-disciplined for large budget planning. If a children gets a thousand dollars, he or she may quickly buy a smart phone without reflection. And they would be spoiled because it is easy and big money. However, their unable to dispose of large money does not mean that parents should give up their opportunities to grow the capability of the financial management. Instead of lots of money, parents are encouraged to provide a little amount of cash to their children for each great academic achievement. Whatever they buy, they would learn how to do the financial plan. For example, if they really want to buy something expensive, they would know that they have to save more money to fulfill the goal. If they do so, they would develop the habit of saving money and grow discipline as well by. Therefore, it is advantageous for parents to reward their children for high academic performance by money.
Naysayers may argue that giving money under certain condition would develop their desire to the money, not the academic achievement. Indeed, there are some cases that students want to get high grade just because of it. It seems that encouraging them to study harder would be better than giving them award by cash. Nevertheless, most young children are not aware of the importance of the academy in reality. Despite few pupils have strong motivation to study hard, most pupils are passive, spending so much time playing video games or other entertainments. Thus, disciplining students by money is an efficient way to save them before overindulged in playing game or other entertainment.
Still, the practice is not proper for actively studying students. Because those who have already set up their mind for pursing higher grade, they would not be attracted by money as a motivation at all. Instead, putting the budget on offering them a better school, as a reward, would be more inspiring them. For instance, if a student is very interested in academic achievement, than he or she would be more likely to study in higher education level. One will get more satisfied If parents provide him or her a superlative education environment.
In conclusion, parents should offer their children reward of money for each excellent academic fulfillment, but not for the highly self-disciplined pupils.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, of course

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2236.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99107142857 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76197170934 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495535714286 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.4654793208 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1666666667 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41666666667 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269015852073 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0873631799933 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731352578955 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181204502386 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0653925738057 0.0645574589148 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, of course

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2236.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 448.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99107142857 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76197170934 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495535714286 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.4654793208 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.1666666667 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41666666667 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 11.8709677419 168% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269015852073 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0873631799933 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731352578955 0.0737576698707 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181204502386 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0653925738057 0.0645574589148 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.