The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Nowadays , There is a tool which controls and manage people’s behaviors in a society under the rules. It is not designed by only one person but It need be legalized and accepted by government in a in justice way. But if our rules are not strong and strict enough , they will likely break these law and its consequence is lowering its trustworthy and reliance and then people are more being wrongdoers because of not being scared of the laws anymore. So,I ,personally , disagree with this statement ,which is rules in our society are too austere for young people for two reasons ,which will be explained in this essay.
Firstly , Teenager is the age of highly being at risk. Because In this age, they will be easily influenced by some factors whether it be friends or environment. So If they were in a bad environment and had bad friends , they would follow their friends and do something as they do that is unlawful like taking addictive drugs , drinking alcohol and even bothering other people by racing motorcycle in resident areas at night. Therefore, the laws should be strong enough to regulate them and they should be responsible for what they have done. Similarly to when they were children when they did something wrong ,so they would get punishment by their parent to make them realize that which is right and which is wrong.
Moreover, the strict rules can teach young people some lessons that what they are doing is not right. If they kept on doing bad things, It would affect to our future that there would have few good people in this world and on other hand more and more bad people would be increasing simultaneously. With this strict laws would be an effective way to stop those young people from doing that. And It can teach them that there is no way out for bad people to escape. It also has a great impact to those who are thinking of being a villain because it can inherit that thought. As a result of that, young people who did badly are able to repent themselves and be good citizen for improving our countries in the future.
To sum up, I firmly believe that the laws are not restrict to young people because young people are in a risk of being induced so easily and this rules can give them some lessons for those to not doing a bad thing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, similarly, so, then, therefore, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 34.0 15.1003584229 225% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1861.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55012224939 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35883061487 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476772616137 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 565.2 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.8628902089 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.3125 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5625 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9375 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178494146023 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070757025385 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698564511031 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133652760643 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0647847983147 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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