Should young adults stay with their parents or leave them as soon as possible?
In my vantage point, I reckon that young adults should live independantly from their parents as soon as possible.In the ensuing lines, I will elabroate on this on the most cogent grounds.
Firstly, it instills in them the sense of independance. living separetly away from their parents, alerts their attention to the new reality which is, you, from now on, are fully responsible for yourself and your life as a whole. And as such, they intuitively realize that they have to strive in order to be productive and achieve their own set-out goals, which is the key impetus of success. a prime example on this is, the Egyptian billionaire business man, Enan Elgalaly. Contrary to the most Egyptian counterparts of his, he moved away from his family at a young age and immigrated to Denemark where he started from scratch working hard and accomplishing a pinacole after the other till he became one of the most, if not the most, successful businessmen the Egyptian history has come accross ever.This, thus, true to life example shows firsthand how effective staying away from father and mother is on creating productive individuals from the young adults as a result of building up the trait of being self-made.
On the top of this, it braodens their horizons. This happens courtesy of encountering hardships and troubled times which is likely to drive them to make mistakes while trying to turn around them on their own without help fron their family. Hence, these errors turn into life experiences they capitalize on afterwards the rest of their lives. This is really exemplified on by me. I left my family when I was 18, and needless to say that I had been bombabarded with difficulies that I had learnt a lot from in light of the trial and errors technique. Therefore, I ended up becomming a respectably highly educated pharmacist all my community looks up to. This indicates how productive is depending one on themselves dealing with their issues on their lives.
Moreover, inspite of being conceptualized as risky specifically when it comes to their religious principlas and morals, it is falacious. Given that parents play their crucially impportaning parenting role from the get go of their children. So, no need for parents now as those adolescants are not immature kids anymore.
To conclude, I believe that young individuals should leave their family home sooner than later in light of the aforementioned arguments.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, look, moreover, really, so, still, therefore, thus, while, i reckon, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2031.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01481481481 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8317058722 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585185185185 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 625.5 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 110.963443589 48.9658058833 227% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 119.470588235 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8235294118 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.29411764706 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281300656124 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791287178169 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683180332021 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163783586052 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471922568525 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.