When coming to career matters, the debate over whether people should take various jobs before they have a stable career is still fierce. Some may assert that taking several different positions is a waste of time and that young people should decide on a long-run career based on their expertise and strength. However, I hold this view differently. I believe young people should have several different work experiences before they reach a long-term job.
To begin with, young people need different work experiences to help them figure out a suitable job. As an old saying goes “Interest is the best teacher.” Isolated in their ivory towers, students, even some senior students who face graduation soon, have no idea about the real world and what job they are interested in. Young people are motivated to do well only when they show great interest in that specific field. Imagine that they get a job they do not like. In that case, they may show poor performance, which works against their self-efficacy. Therefore, there is no more efficient approach to finding a fit long-term career than experiencing different types of work. These experiences can provide them with a comprehensive and objective understanding of the employment market and finally enable them to make a rational career decision.
Moreover, young people can learn a lot from different job experiences. A stable long-term job means young people only get in touch with their coworkers and surrounding people, which is boring and never thought-provoking. In contrast, taking different jobs can provide young people an excellent opportunity to mingle with more talented people. They can get to know people with various personalities and people from different backgrounds; making friends with them is refreshing and exciting, which also can expand their social circle. And all of these expand their knowledge and broaden their horizon
In a nutshell, it is undoubtedly a wiser choice to take several different types of jobs before they decide on a long-term career for the reasons discussed above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'asserts'.
Suggestion: asserts
...stable career is still fierce. Some may assert that taking several different positions...
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Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
...ill fierce. Some may assert that taking several different positions is a waste of time and that y...
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Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
...tly. I believe young people should have several different work experiences before they reach a lo...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...to help them figure out a suitable job. As an old saying goes “Interest is the bes...
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Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
...t is undoubtedly a wiser choice to take several different types of jobs before they decide on a l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, even so, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1737.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 333.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21621621622 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79307693346 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540540540541 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4856048336 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.5625 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8125 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.625 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.570196534174 0.236089414692 242% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.197569047033 0.076458572812 258% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123222772822 0.0737576698707 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.384511654393 0.150856017488 255% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.093860129993 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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