In this rapidly growing technological world, importance of education is widely realized. Parents are doing all kinds of things to make their kid star performer in class. There is no shortage of debate regarding whether its good to offer money as reward for securing good marks in school. Generally, speaking I believe that small amount of money as reward can actually be beneficial to kids. I fell this way for several reasons which I explore in following essay.
First, it's important to consider money can be motivating factor for a kid. Certainly, some students have urge to do well without depending on external motivation. But, a small amount of money as reward to good score might not do any harm. My own personal experience is a good example of this. During my school days, my dad used to offer me some amount if I secured first position in my class even though I never asked for it. It made me study hard. Many of my friends parents also used to do the same. It made us really competitive in our class.
In addition to importance of motivation, it's better to teach kids value of money by giving it as a reward. The money which I received as reward helped me to manage finances from younger age. Of course, some kids do not use that money for good cause and they might expect more from their parents. But, it is not the case with most of the kids. Because, it is the reward for their hard work and hence they are more likely to utilize it for good cause.
Finally, offering money does not necessarily mean this is the only source of motivation. I would be the first person to admit that many students misuse the money or start black mailing the parents for more. But, in most of the cases students can understand parents problem if they cannot afford the money sometimes. In fact, students can buy books or some essential things that they need from this saved amount instead of asking it from parents.
In summary based on the arguments explored above, I am of the opinion that in most cases it's actually more beneficial for most kids to receive money as reward.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 90, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... I am of the opinion that in most cases its actually more beneficial for most kids ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, hence, if, really, regarding, so, well, in addition, in fact, in summary, of course, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 374.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.56417112299 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36921480992 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516042780749 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.7845416649 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.2173913043 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2608695652 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86956521739 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250584566253 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731146117276 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535836751194 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142342435442 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0566512386705 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.87 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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