Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
In this century, technology such as mobile phone is the most important belonging that every individuals bring. They even will recognize if their phones are missing fom their bags or pocket. However, some countries parents debated about the ussage of mobile phone for teenagers because it will affected to their productivity in daily lifes. Meanwhile, the remains said that phone is the most important thing for young children to carry for keep their communication to their parents. In my opinion, I believe that phone is the must product that children should bring whenever they go. In this essay I will explain about why phone is important thing and the example in daily activities.
In this century, parents and children have their own activities to do. Parents need to go to the company for working and childrens need to go to school by their own. In this case, if childrens have an affair when they need to go to school, they able to contact their parents directly without any hesitation. For instance, my cousin last week went to school with her driver and she forgot to tell her mother about the parents meeting that day. So, she could directly contact to her mother and told about the important meeting during the day.
On the other hand, technologies like smartphone also create some innovation application for children which they able to learn everywhere, even in place that does not have internet access. Education applications made for accompany parents when they need to do important things while kids also have some activities to do. Parents also able to save much money if they able to utilize the benefit of phone usage for kids. For the example, my parents bought iphone for my little sister to accomodate the effectiveness learing at home, my sister also very happy to learn from those applications and she able to learn faster than the other childrens in her age.
In conclusion, the usage of mobile phone for kids have several advantages that most parents know. Therefore, parents will greateful if they acompany kids by giving an access to use the technology like mobile phone.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 294, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'affect'
Suggestion: affect
...ile phone for teenagers because it will affected to their productivity in daily lifes. M...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...and the example in daily activities. In this century, parents and children have...
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Line 7, column 165, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...eateful if they acompany kids by giving an access to use the technology like mobile phone...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1753.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 356.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92415730337 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49622078952 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491573033708 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.0 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1050523614 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.117647059 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9411764706 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52941176471 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313825597294 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112178772034 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0418534561898 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185970406952 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445040075409 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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