Some parents forbid young children from owning smart phones cell phones with Internet access while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch Which point of view do you think is better and why

In this century, technology such as mobile phone is the most important belonging that every individuals bring. They even will recognize if their phones are missing fom their bags or pocket. However, some countries parents debated about the ussage of mobile phone for teenagers because it will affected to their productivity in daily lifes. Meanwhile, the remains said that phone is the most important thing for young children to carry for keep their communication to their parents. In my opinion, I believe that phone is the must product that children should bring whenever they go. In this essay I will explain about why phone is important thing and the example in daily activities.

In this century, parents and children have their own activities to do. Parents need to go to the company for working and childrens need to go to school by their own. In this case, if childrens have an affair when they need to go to school, they able to contact their parents directly without any hesitation. For instance, my cousin last week went to school with her driver and she forgot to tell her mother about the parents meeting that day. So, she could directly contact to her mother and told about the important meeting during the day.

On the other hand, technologies like smartphone also create some innovation applications for children which they able to learn everywhere, even in place that does not have internet access. Education applications made for accompany parents when they need to do important things while kids also have some activities to do. Parents also able to save much money if they able to utilize the benefit of phone usage for kids. For the example, my parents bought iphone for my little sister to accomodate the effectiveness learing at home, my sister also very happy to learn from those applications and she able to learn faster than the other childrens in her age.

Lastly, chilren able to access more videos in their own mobile phone to learn about some skills such as reading, speaking, and listening while watching to the educational videos on youtube. This days, a lot of content creators create the animated video that children friendly. My sister always look at pepa bowl videos in youtube and she know a lot of english new vocabulary from that video. I think this method also helpful for children to learn while they think this method is not the part of learning process.

In conclusion, the usage of mobile phone for kids have several advantages that most parents know. Therefore, parents will greateful if they acompany kids by giving an access to use the technology like mobile phone.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 294, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'affect'
Suggestion: affect
...ile phone for teenagers because it will affected to their productivity in daily lifes. M...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...and the example in daily activities. In this century, parents and children have...
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Line 7, column 191, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...g to the educational videos on youtube. This days, a lot of content creators create ...
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Line 7, column 339, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'knows'.
Suggestion: knows
... at pepa bowl videos in youtube and she know a lot of english new vocabulary from th...
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Line 7, column 505, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to process'
Suggestion: to process
...this method is not the part of learning process. In conclusion, the usage of mobile ...
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Line 9, column 165, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...eateful if they acompany kids by giving an access to use the technology like mobile phone...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, lastly, look, so, therefore, while, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2182.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90337078652 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45985210218 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469662921348 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 676.8 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8185225646 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.904761905 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1904761905 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.38095238095 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318352736368 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104441591069 0.076458572812 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458142983443 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17595523615 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044561193145 0.0645574589148 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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