Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
Based on scientific research, anyone who would like to reduce their stressful mind needs to try extreme sport such as sky diving, skiing and many more. However, several groups believe that dangerous sport is not safe enough to try. Personally I disagree with the restriction to extreme sports. I think that can reduce the sport's attraction in some countries and also create a high unemployment rate.
Any countries have a different tourist attraction, like in New Zeland they have an extreme sport called buggie jumping. New Zeland has enormous hope from this sports attraction, they are able to gather many visitors from this. Conversely, if association try to ban the dangerous sports, some countries like New Zeland dropped the rate of tourist that courios about the feeling when they try to play buggie jumping.
In addition, the unemployment rate will rocket because their working site permanently closed. Also, professional sport takers need to change their path because they are not able to fly and skiing again. Moreover, is not that easy to find any new job if they do not have any other experience rather than working at sports facilities. For instance, my cousin, she is a badminton athlete since 5 years old and has less experience in school because she needs to practice every single day. When she stopped her daily activities at the badminton community, she has to work harder to find any other path to maintain her financial issue.
In conclusion, the district for extreme sports do not need to be placed to help several aspects such as workers, athletes, and countries. The thinking about unsafety sports can be reduced by checking all the equipment regularly and replace the broken ones. So, all aspects are able to try and reduce their mindful stress.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 119, Rule ID: SKY_DIVING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'skydiving'?
Suggestion: skydiving
...mind needs to try extreme sport such as sky diving, skiing and many more. However, several...
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Line 1, column 323, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
...eme sports. I think that can reduce the sports attraction in some countries and also c...
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Line 5, column 160, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
... New Zeland has enormous hope from this sports attraction, they are able to gather man...
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Line 13, column 286, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...roken ones. So, all aspects are able to try and reduce their mindful stress.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, however, if, moreover, so, as to, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1489.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 296.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03040540541 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54999095875 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567567567568 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.4667994685 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2666666667 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7333333333 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140461549329 0.244688304435 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516933089432 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0404270722584 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0885651243377 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260373356566 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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