Some parents forbid young children from owning smartphones (cell phones with Internet access), while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch. Which point of view do you think is better, and why?
It’s conspicuously evident that we live in a technological reality. Technology has been not just entertain us through usual streaming services, but it has taken over our reality from our jobs to our daily communication. This being said, not just adults, but kids need to have access to a cell phone with internet in order to keep in touch with their parents and loved ones and to be able to improve their skills and knowledge.
First, having a cellphone nowadays is crucial if you want to keep in touch with not just your loved ones, but with people in your nearest social circles. Children need to grow and develop, and it implies the importance of them being accountable, going out by themselves, and being trusted by their parents. With a smartphone, kids can reach out to their parents at any time, being accountable of where they are. Even if they can’t or don’t know how to use it, internet allows the network services to localize them at any place or time. I remember when I was a kids, I had some singing practices every Saturday. My mom would drop me out there and go to work and she only would go pick me up once I called her up through my cell phone. It made communication easier.
Secondly, we live in an Era of Information. We are always connected, seeking new knowledge and how to integrate them, how to be wiser on managing the information we know. The convenience of owning a cellphone with internet in our current world allows us to be more connected, enables us to search to verify any new information, keeps us aware of news and important information through videos and articles. I remember when I was a kid, I had watched a movie, through my cellphone, that was about a girl who met someone online but later discovered he was not who he said he was, and she managed to scape safe before anything happened. Later them, something very similar happened to me. I remembered what I saw in the movie, told my mom, blocked the person and never saw him again. My mom had never thought me about that, but, because of the information available online, I could recover it and use it in my life.
Therefore, given the cruciality of owning a smartphone at the present time, I think that children should have one, which allow them to reach out to their parents easier than without it, plus they can learn new information and be more aware of important worldly updates.
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- Some parents forbid young children from owning smartphones cell phones with Internet access while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch Which point of view do you think is better and why 76
- Some parents forbid young children from owning smartphones cell phones with Internet access while others disagree and believe that they are important tools for keeping in touch Which point of view do you think is better and why 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 559, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a kid' or simply 'kids'?
Suggestion: a kid; kids
...ny place or time. I remember when I was a kids, I had some singing practices every Sat...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1962.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58411214953 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62520769343 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549065420561 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.5205806824 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.0 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7777777778 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11111111111 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153242786029 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0408344146375 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0505971284675 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105605395787 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420744255926 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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