Some parents give their kids (primary or middle school) a small amount of money weekly, while others fear this may have a bad influence on kids. What is your opinion?
Recently, there’s a controversial phenomenon has appeared in modern society. Many opinions sprang up and many people stood for different views. What they argued is the question that if parents should give their kids a small amount of money weekly. Some parents think it’s good for them while others think it may have a bad influence on kids. About this question, I strongly agree that parents should give their kids a small amount of money weekly for two reasons.
Firstly, a small amount of money with children can help them out of trouble in an emergency. Kids usually get into troubles without their parents’ help, or their parents sometimes cannot be at the place where the kids are. This time, when they get into trouble, a small amount of money can afford them to do something that can help them get out of trouble. And a small amount of money won’t cause bad influences because the amount is too small to spend on other things. Take my younger brother as an example, last year, when he was seven years old, his parents started giving him 10 yuan every week. Once, when he was in a shopping plaza with his parents, he couldn’t find them after they decided to come back to home. He felt anxious, then he found that he has ten yuan. Finally, he took a taxi to go home and met his parents at home. From his example, we can learn that a small amount of money can help them out of trouble in an emergency. So I think it is important and it is necessary for parents to give them some money.
Secondly, children hold some money can help them developing the ability of financing, or the ability of managing their money. And a small amount of money can help them experience the feeling of every little makes a mickle. In other words, a small amount of money can hardly buy or do something, but if they save them for a long time, it’ll be a large amount of money. Take Bill Gates as an example, when he was in his childhood, his parents gave him one dollar weekly, in order to developing his financing ability. He stuck on saving the money his parents gave him. So several years later, he become one of the world famous businessman in the world. Gates’ example tells us having a small amount of money won’t influence kids. On the contrary, it can stimulate kids to save money. All in all, I prefer that parents should give their kids a small amount of money weekly.
From what has been discussed above, I can draw a conclusion that parents give their kids a small amount of money weekly won’t have bad influence on kids, instead, it will help students in a wide range of ways. In conclusion, I prefer the opinion that I have discussed above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 50, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to develop' or 'develop'.
Suggestion: to develop; develop
... children hold some money can help them developing the ability of financing, or the abilit...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, while, i think, in conclusion, in other words, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2185.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 484.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.51446280992 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30469904662 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448347107438 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 661.5 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9791400774 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0384615385 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6153846154 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.96153846154 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.38532149759 0.236089414692 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126372956649 0.076458572812 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105038882573 0.0737576698707 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.301471919646 0.150856017488 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0813100138162 0.0645574589148 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.85 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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