Parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than determine their children’s future for them.
It has always been a common problem for parents and children to have different opinions, no matter in the past or at the moment. And the problem of letting children make their own choices for their future development or their parents determine their future for them has came into our mind. Some people may agree that it’s better to let their parents to determine their future for them. But I still strongly agree with that it’s better for us to make our own choices.
To begin, we had to admit that children may get more information about the direction of future development, so they can keep pace with the society. Our world is changing dramatically in a rapid way. Children may have more ways to get information than their parents, they know the fashion and the trend of future. But their parents may lack of new information. This time, children’s choices in determining what they would like to learn is more reasonable. Take my brother, Fred, as an example, he’s a strong-minded guy, so when he meets situations that need his choices, he could give a choice immediately and tell his parents about the reason because he almost knows everything about what happened around the world. So two years ago when he was choosing his major, he predicted Computer Science will become the trend several years later. Now his prediction has already be proved. In conclusion, the idea of children can get more information is still reasonable.
Secondly, children know what they really like or interested in, but parents may choose the pace that they want their children do. As an old saying goes, “Interest is the best teacher.” When their parents asked them to do or learn one major, but they don’t interest in it at all, they will have the sense of rebel. This time, even they finally did that choice, they won’t achieve huge achievements because they are not, even be not good at that thing. How do they strive to learn it? Everyone knows Steven Jobs, he’s just a perfect example to illustrate this idea. When he was in his childhood, he has a strong weariness of learning. He usually plays truant and take his friends to a garage, his laboratory, instead of study at school. When his mother knows about that, she prevents him but he still trying to do his own things. Several years later, he established Apple. All in all, I strongly agree that making choices by ourselves is important even necessary.
From what has been discussed above, I can draw a conclusion that no matter in the past or at now, our parents should give us the right to make choices by ourselves.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: come
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, still, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 78.0 43.0788530466 181% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2137.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73835920177 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50735762259 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50332594235 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.4628837052 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0416666667 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7916666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.04166666667 5.45110844103 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.337869041811 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100032651117 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137317351452 0.0737576698707 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.231715946382 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.180386859634 0.0645574589148 279% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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