Some parents offer their school-age children money of each high grade they get in school. I think this is a good idea because children want money and parents want high grade. Hence, this is a good way to get better grades. Students will study very hard to get money. When I was a student, I needed many things, and I had money because my parents gave me when I got high scores.
On the other hand, this topic has a negative part. Intuitively, this is a transaction between a child and a parent. I don’t think it’s a good education for a child to be paid for a good grade. Since, If you continue to live this way the child always thinks there should be something in return to him or her like me now.
Overall, I disagree this idea. Of course I won’t do it to my child in the future. I will not force my child to study. I think this method is also a coercive means to make students study for money.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eans to make students study for money.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, so, i think, of course, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 52.1666666667 31% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 751.0 1977.66487455 38% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 175.0 407.700716846 43% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.29142857143 4.8611393121 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63713576256 4.48103885553 81% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35189892883 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 212.727598566 47% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 231.3 618.680645161 37% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.2080184999 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 57.7692307692 100.406767564 58% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.4615384615 20.6045352989 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46153846154 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.497876978664 0.236089414692 211% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.156741020284 0.076458572812 205% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.177713248157 0.0737576698707 241% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.286643867038 0.150856017488 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.173884182721 0.0645574589148 269% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.5 11.7677419355 47% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 83.66 58.1214874552 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 4.8 10.1575268817 47% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.01 10.9000537634 64% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.63 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 26.0 86.8835125448 30% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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