Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Children are really innocent and learn the things parents taught. It is important for parents to take care of the needs of their children. Some people are inclined toward the attitude that it does not matter what the children are doing they keep providing them money even the grades are low, whereas, others hold different perspectives. I personally, though, believe that children should be given some money when do well in exams. In the following essay, I intend to put forth my points and reasons for support.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that the money children get from their parents as a reward keeps them motivated. It is essential for such age group students because without rewards no wants to do anything so how can we aspect from our children to be so amazing. To exemplify, my son is only 9 years old and he knows everything like the prices of his favorite candies, games, and toys. Last year he told me that he wants a play station which is absolutely expensive. I told him, if he gets good marks then I will give him some money and it will be all yours, buy whatever you want. Moreover, he was so happy and pass his second standard with flying colors. Therefore, this example clearly illustrates the importance of giving rewards to children.
Secondly, it is the responsibility of parents to teach children the use of money wisely because the youngsters are not sharp enough to know the use by itself. As the world is getting advance the chances of this generation to involve in wrong actions becoming higher, make sure youth do not buy illegal things by reward. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. I was accustomed to providing a lot of money to my daughter as a gift and did not realize where she is using it. In the first two years she did well in school and in extra activities won first prize in all tasks, but eventually, her performance decline and her teacher called me and told all story. Moreover, it was painful for me then I just start keeping an eye on her. Thus, rewards can sometimes put people in danger.
In light of the reasons mentioned, I strongly believe that always keep everything controlled either it is a reward.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...iding a lot of money to my daughter as a gift and did not realize where she is us...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, well, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1844.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5467577427 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5725 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.191385893 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.2 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257570863702 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681130427828 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050614443286 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1346253672 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.075283848644 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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