Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade they get in school. Do you think it is a good idea?
In the recent hectic era, success in the educational career of offsprins, has become a paramount issue that preoccuping a plethora of parents' mind. They try to use many methods to encourage their young to put more effort and gain more and more success in their educational career. One of these methods is offering children money for a high grade they get in school. A throng of parents maintain that this method and offering other goods is an effective way to inspiring the children for use more time in studying than they spend for entertainment. While other are against this method and argue this method could grow the children as money lover and teach them that you should do anything just for money and not for spirit. As far as I concerned, the former point carries more weight, especially if it combined by some sort of for low grade. I take this advantage point on the account of the following arguments.
First and for most, the .... is a natural process that is rule over our world. Negleting some exceptions, you always take reward for doing goog works and punish for bad ones. By using this method, young would learn this natural rule and adopt themselves. This rule can be generalized in nearly every aspect of the life. You do exercise and will be rewarded by getting a good shape and a healthy state. Even in a broader point of view, men polluted the environment and they punished by many disease and difficulties. If they paid attention to this rule, they would think more about what they did.
Secondly, in the learning process that is the main goal of this method, it hase been proved that system of .... is the way our brain follows. Even in Artificial Intelligence that is a cut-edging branch of computer science, scientist imitate the humans' brain and make artificial neural networks that is the basis for many the-state-of-the-art issues like computer vision and voice recogniition and many more. These artificial networks works exactly on the basis of the system of reward and punishment. Albeit mathematically rather than biologically. Therefore we see how effective this method could be for learnig process.
To sum up, after all factors being taken into consideration, we might come to a conclusion that the advantageus of paying money to school-age children for ... surpass its disadvantageous. Alebeit some psychological matters shoould be considered as some of them are stated. We must always remember in this rapidly growing compatitive world, success in educational career is a strong pedstone that one could stablish his brilliant future on it.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 826, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...specially if it combined by some sort of for low grade. I take this advantage poi...
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Line 3, column 486, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun disease seems to be countable; consider using: 'many diseases'.
Suggestion: many diseases
...ed the environment and they punished by many disease and difficulties. If they paid attentio...
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Line 5, column 550, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...athematically rather than biologically. Therefore we see how effective this method could ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, after all, sort of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96304849885 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78378297421 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545034642032 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 660.6 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.4306774269 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.96 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.32 20.6045352989 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292490225499 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720217576618 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100678444676 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157362158287 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104787444318 0.0645574589148 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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