There is no gainsaying that in modern days, the great majority of parents do not have adequate time to devote to their children. In this respect, there are controversial arguments that parents how should spend time with their children. Some people believe that they should just concentrate on the children education and help them to do schoolworks while some people maintain that parents should use this time to have fun. From my perspective, parents should be a good friend instead of a good teacher or tutor. Ensuing paragraphs will elaborate my points of view.
First exquiste point to be mentioned is that children are able to teach many things to their parents through playing games or sports. There is no doubt that high education have a pivotal role in human life. Nevertheless, there is nothing as important as health for human beings. Due to playing games and doing sports, chilren are more likely to be healthy. In other words, wise parents attach a great important to their children's heath and they encourage their children to be more active instead of having a sedentary life. In better worlds, it is undeniable that children need to playing even more than anything.
Second point that comes to my mind is that parents should provide a safe and joyful environment for theri children. Thanks to games and sports, parents are capable to have abundant enjoyment with their children. Undoubtedly, children who enjoy their lives are more likely to be successful in society. In additions, they might attempt more efficiently in schools to become a top student. For example, when I was studying in primary school, I just had a main incentive for being a successful student; I studied hard to make my parents happy.
Last but not least, parents have no replacement. In better words,children can deal with their schoolworks by using numerous and various ways. They can survey on internet, use some addition books, asking for help from their friends or even tutors. Noneless, there is no doubt that parents have an unique role in children's lives and nobody else can play this role.
In conclusion, contemplating all aforementioned paragraphs, parents should attach importance to their children's education, but when they do not have enough time and they should opt between playing with children or hleping them to do schoolworks, there is no debate that they should choose the former option.
- TPO-45 Integrated Writing Task 60
- TOEFL T P O 32 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- TPO 49- Independent writingDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?The ability to maintain friendships with a small number of people over a long period of time is more important for happiness than the ability to make many new friends easily. 70
- Workers are more satisfied when they have many different types of tasks to do during the workday than when they do similar tasks all day long.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use specific reasons and examples to suppo 71
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, nevertheless, second, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2009.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04773869347 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65853961471 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2118164092 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6666666667 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9523809524 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364391303044 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109571288929 0.076458572812 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0918641504137 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209375875795 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0780157145398 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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