Some people say that the best preparation for life is learning to work with others and be cooperative. Others take the opposite view and say that learning to be competitive is the best preparation. Discuss these positions, using concrete examples of both. Tell which one you agree with and explain why
Some people believe that learning to be competitive is best way for preparation, I feel it is true to some extend and might even help you be successful, but for a short duration. If you want to grow faster then grow alone and competitive but if you want to grow stronger then, grow with a team. So, I believe to achieve something greater in life we should learn to work with others and be cooperative.
To begin with, working together and helping others will help the people to grow individually and help them achieve their goal. For example, i was a bright student in my class and i used to score good marks. Then our teachers started a new trend by introducing an extra period, where all students will study in groups and will try to solve each others doubts. During these sessions i used to explain the subject to ,,my group members and i realized that, my understanding is also getting improved and i scored even better marks. So helping other also in some meant that i was helping my self. Another example, A person wanted to start a company, he could have done it all alone. But he is wanted to make it a world wide big company so, he included his friends into his idea who also were interested in the project and they all worked hard. Resulting company Infosys which is a world wide name today.
Secondly, I believe working with other help you get a support where as working alone that too being competitive will always just add more stree to someone's like. While working together even if you fail you will support and people who will be saying that we can win next time. But where working alone by being competitive you will never be satisfied with what ever you do. You will always be in a race where you want be first and you will not have inner peace which most important.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that working in team is better of learning rather than learning alone in competitive way. As working together will give you serene feeling and being competitive would not let you focus on dreams.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the best'.
Suggestion: is the best
...believe that learning to be competitive is best way for preparation, I feel it is true ...
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Message: Did you mean 'extent' ("extent" is a noun, "extend" is a verb)?
Suggestion: extent
... preparation, I feel it is true to some extend and might even help you be successful, ...
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Message: Did you mean 'faster than'?
Suggestion: faster than
...r a short duration. If you want to grow faster then grow alone and competitive but if you w...
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...rt duration. If you want to grow faster then grow alone and competitive but if you w...
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Message: Did you mean 'stronger than'?
Suggestion: stronger than
...and competitive but if you want to grow stronger then, grow with a team. So, I believe to ach...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
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...p them achieve their goal. For example, i was a bright student in my class and i ...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
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... i was a bright student in my class and i used to score good marks. Then our teac...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
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...ch others doubts. During these sessions i used to explain the subject to ,,my gro...
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...ssions i used to explain the subject to ,,my group members and i realized that, my...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
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...n the subject to ,,my group members and i realized that, my understanding is also...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
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...erstanding is also getting improved and i scored even better marks. So helping ot...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
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...o helping other also in some meant that i was helping my self. Another example, A...
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Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: worldwide
...ll alone. But he is wanted to make it a world wide big company so, he included his friends...
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Message: Did you mean 'worldwide'?
Suggestion: worldwide
...ll alone. But he is wanted to make it a world wide big company so, he included his friends...
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Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: worldwide
...d. Resulting company Infosys which is a world wide name today. Secondly, I believe wo...
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Message: Did you mean 'worldwide'?
Suggestion: worldwide
...d. Resulting company Infosys which is a world wide name today. Secondly, I believe wo...
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Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
...rking with other help you get a support where as working alone that too being competitiv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1663.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 367.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53133514986 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3735801018 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514986376022 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.1265630617 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8235294118 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5882352941 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94117647059 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270335550032 0.236089414692 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0948877372901 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0844869614406 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178577531384 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0754889557344 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.87 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.