Some people say that the best preparation for life is learning to work with others and be cooperative. Others take the opposite view and say that learning to be competitive is the best preparation. Discuss these positions, using concrete examples of both. Tell which one you agree with and explain why.
The ultimate goal of each person's life is to have a happy life in the term of having a good job, a happy family. The way to reach this goal is to learn and work through our lives. Some people say that learning to be competitive is the best preparation for life, others say that learning to work with others and be cooperative is the best preparation for life. In my opinion, I agree with the latter one because this way of learning brings comfort to everyone and it also is more effective.
First, learning to work with others and be cooperative help people to prepare their lives in a comfortable way. In life, people have numerous tasks to accomplish as well as various and continuing challenges to overcome. It will be much easier when having a partner to perform these tasks and challenges. For example, when I was in high school, my friends and I, we had common stress about how to pass the test to enter the University. I had three closed friends and we decided to team up and study together. Each person in four of us had strength in a different subject, so the plan was the strongest person in a particular subject would help others. All the concepts, theories, examples were hard to understand clearly. Learning together helped us to reduce time to figure those things out, and have more time to review them before the test. Our stress was relieved and we felt more enjoyable and comfortable with studying. Finally, we were all accepted to enter the University that we desired to, in addition, our friendship became more tighten. Hence, I believe that working as a strong team is the best preparation for life.
Second, learning to work with others and be cooperative is an effective way to prepare for life. To have a happy life people need both success and happiness. Even though learning to be competitive can make a person sharpen and successful, that person often suffers loneliness and distress. As you can see, in my story above, by studying together and support each other, my friends and I accomplished our tests better. We all reached our targets. Moreover, teamwork washed out the stress and other difficulties in studying. Entering the university was the first steady step in the preparation for our bright lives. Base on this, I support the opinion that the best preparation for life is learning to work together as a cooperative team.
In conclusion, I maintain that to have the best preparation for life, people should learn to work with others and be cooperative. Because learning in this way bring comfort and enjoyment for all group members and it is also an effective way of learning. The world will be more beautiful and peaceful if each different individual has a teamwork attitude in life's activities.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 27, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
The ultimate goal of each persons life is to have a happy life in the ter...
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Line 2, column 91, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a comfortable way" with adverb for "comfortable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...tive help people to prepare their lives in a comfortable way. In life, people have numerous tasks to...
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Line 2, column 207, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'overcoming'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: overcoming
...ll as various and continuing challenges to overcome. It will be much easier when having a p...
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Line 2, column 898, Rule ID: COMFORTABLE_WITH_VBG[1]
Message: Use simply 'comfortable studying'.
Suggestion: comfortable studying
...relieved and we felt more enjoyable and comfortable with studying. Finally, we were all accepted to enter...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, hence, if, moreover, second, so, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2263.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74423480084 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67038722296 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.454926624738 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.9 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.6507382342 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.0384615385 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3461538462 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.88461538462 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 11.8709677419 194% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.398569694375 0.236089414692 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118689508429 0.076458572812 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158690951572 0.0737576698707 215% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300973796705 0.150856017488 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0956490868909 0.0645574589148 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 11.7677419355 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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