Some people say that teachers and parents should decide what assignment or activities children should do after school. Others say that children should make these decisions on their own. Which view do you agree with and why?
The children’s after school activities has been regarded as one of the most important education for many years. According to the recent report in Taipei Times, there are 87% of the parents sent their children to after-school tutoring. This is because the parents are too busy in these days and they want their child to be success in the future. Therefore, I consider that the best way for youngsters is to decide what assignment and activities children should do after school and not let them make these decision on their own.
To begin with, children are too immature to decide the suitable activities to do after school. For instance, my sister has been using internet when she was 8 and she always surfing on the internet from day to night. If my father let her choose what kind of activity she wants to do after school, she probably will use computer constantly and not focus on her academic works. Thus, the youngsters cannot determine the right things to engage in since they are too childish and not mature enough.
Moreover, the teachers and parents can provide more useful and better arrangement for youth. To be more concise, teachers will give students assignments that they have to absorb full of abundant knowledge to finish it and make students enhance their ability to deal with variety topics. Also, their parents can sent their kids to learn other skills, such as piano, swimming or different kind of languages. As a result, it will provoke youths potential and youth will become expert in many fields which makes them have more options in future’s career.
Irrefutably, some people might maintain their viewpoint that parents or teachers should not interfere in children’s life too much. Specifically, nowadays the children are getting more independent and have their own self-conscious, so they might want to have their own space to do other things. For instance, teenagers would like to hang out with their friends and spend plenty of time to maintain their friendship. Nevertheless, they still are not adults and may make a lot of mistakes that could cause really bad consequences, such like staying their friend’s home and drinking an alcohol drinks. Hence, child should follow the rules and arrangements that their teachers or parents give them.
In conclusion, due to the reasons described above, I am positive that even though young fellows need some freedoms after school, they still need to do the assignments or activities which their teachers or parents arrange for them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 174, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'surfs'.
Suggestion: surfs
... internet when she was 8 and she always surfing on the internet from day to night. If m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, really, so, still, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2117.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06459330144 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66951880872 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543062200957 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8318648761 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.611111111 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2222222222 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61111111111 5.45110844103 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.380487346418 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123543116974 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106710733631 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209922495243 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0933629549111 0.0645574589148 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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