Some people think that the government should spend more money on the education of adults, while others believe that the education of children carries more importance. Which opinion do you advocate?
For many years, one of the essential concerns of every given thoughtful society has related to education as well as the various means to enhance that. It is crystal clear that people who are blessed with a decent education involve a wide range of ages and the government is to make a thorough plan for all people. With this mind, some people argue that education must be allocated to elderly just as the young or even more, while others point out that there is no reasonable justification to invest many different resources in educating the elderly when there are still juveniles who are suffering from lack of sufficient, effective, and decent education. I subscribe to the latter view and support this idea hereunder.
To begin with, the elderly have no enough capacity to master subjects which are going to be taught. In other words, over many years, old people have lost their ability to learn even the trivial, rudimentary things, and as a result, their education will be extremely costly, and time-consuming rather the young who are blessed with fresh, sharp minds, so that they can learn the material very quickly. In addition, this fact that they are virtually incapable of learning tough subjects, imposes extra trouble on the professors as well, for they would have to spend more time as well as energy teaching simple things to them. Therefore, this hardship in learning will lead to the discontentment of professors and teachers. On the other hand, the younger individuals are blessed with the very mind and can learn anything in a blink of an eye. The younger people at lower ages attend universities and schools, the more efficiency will be boosted.
Secondly, it is rational, pleasant for the elderly to rest the rest of their life rather than coping with burdensome tasks such as researching, conducting a survey, doing homework and projects to name but a few. By doing so, life will be more enjoyable, appealing, and pleasant for them. I see no positive point for someone who is, for example 70 years old, deal with challenging duties and ultimately they may not be able to handle their required tasks. More precisely, they ought to relax and go to several travels whenever they can instead of imposing onerous responsibilities on themselves.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that education of the young is by far the most fruitful, logical not only for the young but also for the elderly. Resources such as money, time, and facilities must be allotted to the young and not to older adults. By doing so, not only will we have more efficient education, but the elderly also would be able to enjoy a more exciting moment alongside their families at their old ages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2239.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 458.0 407.700716846 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88864628821 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63913834431 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53056768559 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.9913489753 48.9658058833 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.705882353 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9411764706 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5294117647 5.45110844103 212% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187003376217 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580818147128 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447088299676 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118781354781 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0451323480616 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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