Some people think that the government should use extra money to fund programs to improve the environment. Others think that it is better for the government to spend money to support artistic programs. Which option do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Many people say that improving conditions of artistic programs is beneficial for nation and citizens in many ways. However, I believe that this opinion is lacking in well-founded rationales. In my opinion, expending the country’s budget for environment is appropriate method of spending fiscal. I feel this way for three main reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, having a fine health is the crucial part of life while the appreciating art is optional for mankind. Nowadays, health is getting major concern of human-being because our living ambience is filled with pollutant substances such as carbon dioxide. If the authorities spend money in order to eliminate these problems by improving the environment, individuals of the region will live a healthy life. Therefore, our living condition will be improved. On the other hand, appreciating and producing art is not essential part of human being. Therefore, consuming enormous amount of money for this type of things should be optional for the decision makers of countries.
Secondly, enhancing the ambient situation is advantageous for not only art appreciators but for everyone living in the area, which means the authorities will be appreciated by public as whole. Every individual who are in the region will absolutely take advantage on the improved ambient circumstances irrespective of their personalities. By contrast, most people including me do not even pay attention to arts, which signifies that their life will not be changed with the modification of art. Moreover, if people who are not into an art recognizes that revenue consisted of their taxation money is being spent on things unrelated to their life, they will be frustrated. Eventually, their interest of voting for parties or statesmen doing such things will diminish.
Finally, having satisfactory state of environment is important way to attract tourists, so the nation will take advantage on additional revenue from foreign travelers. People mostly allow for view of landscapes and living condition of places when they plan to travel to other areas. Thereby, if the nation has adequate environmental view, it will the fine way to encourage travelers to visit their country. Conversely, individuals will be less likely to visit the area if the place has satisfactory arts and impoverished environment.
In summation, I am of the opinion of that expending taxation revenue for enhancement of environmental condition is essential step for governments. This is because health issue will be solved, every citizen will appreciate policy, and tourists will be attracted to view.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, conversely, finally, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, i feel, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2243.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39182692308 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03467749857 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543269230769 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.4497287544 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.80952381 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8095238095 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.57142857143 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122445484728 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0421378329961 0.076458572812 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403368260149 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0730245065876 0.150856017488 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0369003028498 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 11.7677419355 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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