Some people think historical sites should be open to the general public, but others think historical sites should only be open to experts and researchers. Which one do you think is better?
In this modern day and age, historical sites are more at risk of devastation due to the lack of responsibility of individuals in terms of protecting the sites. The importance in this regard often leads to serious controversies as to whether everyone should be able to have access to historical sites or it should be open to experts and researchers only. Personally, though, I utterly subscribe to this idea that perhaps a thoughtful combination of both works the best. To discuss this, there are several perspectives, two of dominant which, are explained in detail in the following.
First and foremost, history is for everyone and all people are entitled to know about their past and acknowledge who their ancestors were, what they valued the most, where do they come from, and what their origin is. In other words, who they truly are. Nowadays, more and more people, especially adolescents are at risk of losing their identity. This stems from the fact that thanks to social media, they spend most of their time on their phones and laptops and put no time and effort into thinking thoroughly to find answers to the aforementioned questions. A recent research conducted at the Sharif University of Technology yields several statistics one of which suggests that it is projected that three out of five youngsters under the age of twenty-five, are tremendously susceptible to being depressed in their mid-thirties because of a possible loss in the sense of identity. Encouraging young adults to pay a visit to historical sites may have a positive contribution to reversing the trend and precluding individuals to pay a visit to these places does not do any good in this regard.
On the other hand, it goes without saying that unfortunately, due to lack of enough education, there are people who have this disposition towards damaging the remnants of historical sites. The reason behind this is beyond the scope of this essay but different organizations, on top of them the governments should snap into action as quickly as possible if they want to preserve these sites. After all, historical sites play a critical role in terms of introducing nations to the world and countries can make a good profit by attracting tourists. A good idea would be holding educational classes and giving individuals certificates that indicate a certain person is certified to visit historical sites and has promised not to damage the sites in any way. If violated, he would be banned for life from visiting historical sites all around the world. This might flatline the amount of harm that careless people have had to these sites over the course of the past few years.
To wrap it up, contemplating on what was discussed above, although history is for all people and individuals possess this right to pay a visit to historical sites, in order to mitigate the damage that has been caused by uneducated and careless people, it is recommended for the governments and the organizations in charge of protecting historical sites to raise the awareness of members of societies regarding the importance of saving historical sites.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 228, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...rd often leads to serious controversies as to whether everyone should be able to have access ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, regarding, so, after all, as to, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 93.0 52.1666666667 178% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2596.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 518.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01158301158 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77070365392 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89850062686 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521235521236 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 823.5 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.4325432513 48.9658058833 191% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.705882353 100.406767564 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4705882353 20.6045352989 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11764705882 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26462855179 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0784546350663 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0749151740422 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15758735363 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0535845475764 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 11.7677419355 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 58.1214874552 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.37 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 119.0 86.8835125448 137% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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