Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Along with the progress of human civilization and the complexity of the society, it has become almost unavoidable to use lands for human needs, giving rise to the issue of whether it is more important to use lands for human needs than saving it for endangered animals or not. Logically, people who grew up from diverse environments would certainly maintain various understandings towards such issue but according to my rationale, it is important to save lands for endangered animals. With intensive considerations, numerous bases are divulged to support the claim.
First of all, lands are important for the survival of all the animals. Lands provide sustenance to variety of animals, therefore, when one species overuse lands, other species will not be able to use and gradually extinct. The main problem arise from the extinction of certain species, since the animals in certain area are intertwined, when one animal extincts, it affects the whole ecosystem and might lead to other negative consequences to whole ecosystem, especially in food chain. The example of this situation could be seen in the incident happened in the island located near south Korea. There was one bird species named blue Chigal in the island which served as a key species for the ecosystem of the island. However, due to the habitat destruction caused by humans who used the land for their residential places, the bird population decreased drastically. Since the birds were the main sources of other predators and worked as a hunter that maintained other population in the lower classes, the decline of Chigal bird cause problem in the whole ecosystem of the island. As a consequence, not only the Chigal bird population is decreased, but also other animal species who relied on Chigal bird disappeared, leading to damage in overall ecosystem. Therefore, since lands are crucial for the survival of all animals, the lands should not be exploited only for the human needs.
On top of that, humans have developed sophisticated skills that can satisfy human needs while saving lands for endangered animals. As time pass, mankind were able to achieve complex skills that enhanced the efficiency of the land they use compared to past centuries. One typical example of this skill is building of apartment. Apartment can accommodate thousands of people within limited area by adding extra floors vertically. Due to this skill, humans were able to satisfy their needs by using only small areas of the land. However, other animals do not have complicated skills like humans and therefore need large areas of land to live on. Thus, since humans have already have used enough lands and have skills to satisfy their wants with developed skills, it is important to save lands for other animals to live.
From the above substantiations and assessments, the fact that it is more important to save lands for endangered animals is much more convincing. Not only lands are important sources for animals to live in, but also, humans already have sophisticated skills to satisfy their needs while using small area of lands. Therefore, nothing in my mind regarding previous issue overshadow the ideas stated above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 676, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, regarding, so, therefore, thus, while, first of all, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2664.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 519.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13294797688 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7730044521 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68485062846 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466281310212 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 851.4 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.1608706167 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.090909091 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5909090909 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299353971001 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100446903519 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0827825569439 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222820573526 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0750941814753 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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