Some people think that parents should plan their children’s leisure time carefully. Other people believe? those children should decide for themselves how to spend their free time, Which idea do you agree with?Give reasons for your choice.
Nowadays children are more mentally developed than before, as the society has been changed dramatically. Whether or not the parents decide how their children spend their free time has always been a controversial debate in society. I believe that these days children able to plan how to spend their leisure time effectively. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First, this century children are more aware than the past as everyone has easy access to the internet. Most of the children now have their personal devices, either their parents buy them or they receive them from school, which allows them to connect with the whole world. Therefore, their awareness is far advanced than before which gives them the chance to pick their own choices. My personal example is a compelling illustration of this. I have a 5-year-old smart boy. I bought him a tablet that has many educational applications which gives him a chance to explore a lot of aspects. Since he was aware of each one, he can decide which one is his favorite. My responsibility is to supervise what he is watching, as that is for his security. At the end of the day, he knows which one is beneficent and which one is just for fun, and he can compensate his time between all the available activities.
Secondly, I feel that parents should grow there children to be independent and responsible persons in the community. Giving the children a chance to choose how to spend their free time is an essential step to raise an independent human. I recently read an article in the New York Times about how to improve cognitive development in children. By giving them a chance to decide which game they want to play or how to play with it. For example, when the children decide to play with blocks, they can build either a tower or a house or just a wall, and so on. Indeed, this way will enhance their cognitive development which is important for their social life.
To sum up, the parent should allow their children to choose what they want to do in their leisure time. Then, they will raise a responsible people. Moreover, the children certainly smart enough to deal with their choices as they are more aware than in the past.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... society has been changed dramatically. Whether or not the parents decide how their chi...
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Line 1, column 106, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'Whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: Whether
... society has been changed dramatically. Whether or not the parents decide how their children s...
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Line 3, column 563, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...house or just a wall, and so on. Indeed, this way will enhance their cognitive de...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for example, i feel, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1831.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65903307888 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56821797727 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488549618321 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.5973178588 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.2272727273 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8636363636 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.09090909091 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395061133363 0.236089414692 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11522634408 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0926790053898 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272800285861 0.150856017488 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.072909979431 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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