some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed, other people believe that zoos serve useful functions,which view point do you support?
All of us nearly went to zoo to see a variety of kind of strange or normal animals, maybe for fun or for the scientific issue. We all think about zoos that place where animals trapped from their own nature and dwell. There are many people who agree to establish them, whereas there many disagrees. Personally, I am in two minds about this, I am with this institution for several reasons, and in some cases, while I also disagree in special cases, I will illustrate now.
First,I agree with Zoos, if it was big and suited to animals, which mean that it provides them with large space as they used to be in nature, also if reasons for establishing them are to save animals who are threatened by extinction, that the zoos in these cases help to breed them to high numbers then separate many to forests. For instance, in Jordan the Gazzale is threaten by extinction because the people hunt them in the forest, so the government made special zoo for them named Dana in Ajloun city. the second reason behind zoo building is to help the people to recognize and see a variety of types of animals doesn't exist in the middle east, and to increase your information and knowledge about their life.For example, When I went to Dana last year, I saw lions, bears, dolphins, sea otters, and sea horses that it was the first time I saw these species. It was a good experience to know also about their life from the coach was existed there.
The second opinion is that some Zoos cruel and brutal and should be closed, if they were unsuitable for life, in some zoos there is just cage to trip those animals, no enough food, also unprovided with parks with enough space, as I think those zoos just to make profit from visitors . for example, there is a zoo in my city include lions trapped in a cage,do you really think that this soil and water is enough to them? we should feel in them, this way really kills their soul to life, this environment not like that gad creates them to be in.
In conclusion, The establishment of Zoos depend on the purpose and the suitability of them to animals, I agree zoos if they were for reservation animals,while I disagree if they were brutal.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, really, second, so, then, well, whereas, while, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, kind of, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47341772152 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.3687178284 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513924050633 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 557.1 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.1344086022 159% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.930376296 48.9658058833 186% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.25 100.406767564 147% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.9166666667 20.6045352989 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9166666667 5.45110844103 219% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208272363597 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0777922949714 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537524508314 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12792458064 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0543653752876 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.24 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.0537634409 147% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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