Some people that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games and sports. Others believe that it is best use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork.
Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
In this rapidly developing society, parents often need to deal with a good deal of work tasks that take up a lot of time on this occasion they barely have plenty time to accompany their kids. Some people believe that playing games or sports with children is a better choice to make good use of that time. While others hold the view that parents should company their children to accomplish their school tasks at this time. In my opinion, I completely agree with the former view because of reasons as below.
To begin with, playing games or sports is conducive to parents to form a joyous family atmosphere and cultivate a intimate relationship with their children during spare time. Some amusement activities such as computer games or physical exercises are extremely relaxed and delightful when parents join these items along with kids. In this case, parents and children would enjoy a period of pleasant family time without the pressure of the work and study. On the other hand, there are some recreational games or sports that require both parents and kids to participate in because they need to work together to overcome various difficulties and get a satisfied result eventually. Through a serious of play processes, parents and children not only get to understand each other better but also develop a good sense of cooperation so that they would have a closer relationship than merely doing homework together within that time. Therefore, parents should reasonable plan free time to play with their children.
Moreover, some activities are advantageous for the overall development of children if parents could join in with their kids. There are a number of computer games that contain various high-tech elements so that it would bring benefits for the kids such as enhance responsiveness and preliminary comprehend Internet skills if parents could use leisure time to play those games with their children. Hence, these amusing games not only help children exploit their intelligence but also cultivate their interest in high technology. What is more, taking part in all kinds of sports events such as the basketball or swimming games can promote the healthy growth of kids thus they would possess a healthy body and make plenty of friends who have a equal interest with them so as to make their life more funny. As a result, through playing games or sports with parents, children would own a better development in the future.
Last but not least, children may be tired of learning in the case parents demand them to study schoolwork during their rest time. It is a widely acknowledged that nowadays students need to learn a good deal of subjects and accomplish lots of assignments when they are at campus thus they barely get relaxation at all. Under this circumstance, if parents still require them to study schoolwork at their breathing space, they may lose interest in learning and have a poor relationship with parents. From the above discussion, doing something related to school tasks with parents at free time would cause pressure for children.
To sum up, by playing games and sports, parents would develop a closer relationship with their children. In addition, kids would also make a further achievement in the near future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... joyous family atmosphere and cultivate a intimate relationship with their childr...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...nds who have a equal interest with them so as to make their life more funny. As a result...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, while, as to, in addition, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2703.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 539.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01484230056 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59584368803 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448979591837 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 822.6 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.7488601713 48.9658058833 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.714285714 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.85714285714 5.45110844103 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403140078987 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139758615656 0.076458572812 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0821300423869 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.241873506335 0.150856017488 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0907625530801 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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